自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), avoid unnecessary qualifiers (e.g. "to be honest", "let's say") and repeated phrases. Provide one brief supporting detail about why you didn’t have a bike and, if relevant, a short consequence or memory. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. As a result, I often walked to school with my friends, and I only learned to ride a bike later when I was a teenager.

建議: Give a clear direct answer then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar for phrases like "the majority of people" and name the sport correctly. Use linking words (e.g. "because", "for example") and avoid repeating the same affirmation twice.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because the majority of people use them for commuting and exercise. For example, there are well-known cycling events and many cities have dedicated bike lanes that encourage people to ride.

× Honestly, I would say no because I wasn't from a lavish family, let's say.

✓ Honestly, I would say no because I wasn't from a lavish family.

This sentence contains an unnecessary colloquial tag 'let's say' that disrupts sentence structure and clarity. Remove the phrase to make the sentence grammatically correct and more natural. Also, 'wasn't from a lavish family' is acceptable but consider 'didn't come from a wealthy family' for a more natural phrasing.

× So we had an opportunity, an opportunity to purchase a bike.

✓ So we had an opportunity to purchase a bike.

The repetition 'an opportunity, an opportunity' is redundant and creates awkward sentence structure. Remove the repeated phrase so the sentence reads smoothly. If emphasis is needed, use a single 'an opportunity' or rephrase: 'So we had the opportunity to buy a bike.'

× Definitely yes, because nowadays majority people have their own bikes and in my country we have famous sports which called cycling.

✓ Definitely yes, because nowadays the majority of people have their own bikes, and in my country we have a famous sport called cycling.

Errors: missing article with 'majority' (should be 'the majority of people'), incorrect plural/word choice 'sports' with singular 'called cycling', and awkward relative clause 'which called'. Corrections: add 'the' and 'of' for 'the majority of people', change 'sports' to 'sport' and use the passive/relative form 'called cycling' preceded by 'a' to be grammatical. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× So I would say yes.

✓ So I would say yes.

This short reply is grammatically correct. No changes needed. It fits the conversational context and tense.