自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be concise, and add specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”). Correct verb forms and articles (had, was, a bike). Use one or two supporting details linked logically (e.g., who gave it, what you did with it, a short memory). Keep to maximum 3–4 short sentences and use linking words like “and” or “so” sparingly.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother gave it to me as a birthday present, and I rode it every afternoon around my neighborhood. I especially remember practicing wheelies with my friends until it got dark.

建議: Make your response more fluent, remove hesitations, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear opinion sentence (e.g., “Yes, bikes are quite popular.”). Support it with specific, concise evidence and use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “because,” “often”) to make it coherent. Fix common errors: “people are” or “people riding,” “when I walk” or “when I’m in the car.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, I often see many people riding bikes along the roads when I walk or drive, especially during mornings and evenings. I think cycling is common because it is cheap and convenient for short trips.

× Yeah, I do have a bike when I were a child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do have' with past context 'when I were a child'. Use simple past 'had' to match the past time reference. Also 'were' is incorrect for first person singular; use 'was'. Suggestion: use 'I had' and 'I was' for past descriptions.

× It is my birthday present from my mom.

✓ It was my birthday present from my mom.

The student is describing a past event (owning a bike as a child) so the verb should be past tense 'was' rather than present 'is'. Change to past tense to maintain consistent timeline.

× I love to biking it in the afternoon.

✓ I loved biking it in the afternoon.

The structure 'love to biking' is incorrect. After 'love' you can use the gerund 'biking' or the infinitive 'to bike', but not both. Also, because the context is past time ('when I was a child'), use past 'loved' instead of 'love'. Remove the object 'it' or place it correctly: 'biking' does not need 'it'. Suggestion: 'I loved biking in the afternoon.'

× Umm, I do think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Umm, I think bikes are popular in my country.

Using 'do think' is unnecessary for a simple present affirmative sentence. Use the simple present 'I think' to state opinions. 'Do' is used for emphasis or in questions/negatives.

× When I was walking on the street or I just passed by when I was in the car, I usually see people's are riding along the road.

✓ When I am walking on the street or when I am in a car passing by, I usually see people riding along the road.

This sentence has multiple issues: tense consistency, redundant clauses, incorrect possessive 'people's', and incorrect verb form 'see' for habitual present should be 'see' or 'I usually see people riding' is fine but time clauses use present simple or present continuous for habitual/current observations. Use 'when I am walking' or 'when I am in the car' for general present situations. Replace 'people's are riding' with 'people riding' or 'people are riding'. Suggestion: 'When I am walking on the street or when I am in a car passing by, I usually see people riding along the road.'

× So I do think but it's really popular in my country.

✓ So I do think it's really popular in my country.

The original has an extraneous 'but' that disrupts meaning. Use 'So I do think it's really popular in my country.' to link the observation to the conclusion. Also keep the present tense 'is' for general facts about the country.