自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more concise and use better sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating ‘I was a child’, correct minor grammar (e.g., “bought that for my 15th birthday” → “bought me for my 15th birthday”), and limit to up to five sentences. Add one specific detail to enrich the answer and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a large bicycle for my 15th birthday, and I loved riding it. Because it was sturdy and had wide tires, I felt confident cycling on rough roads. For example, I used it to commute to school every day during that year.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has many hesitations, grammar errors and vague phrasing. Replace fillers (uh), use clearer vocabulary (e.g., “nowadays”), correct grammar (e.g., “bikes are not used as much as in the past”), and give a specific reason and an example. Use a linking word like ‘because’ to show cause and limit to a few coherent sentences.

範例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular nowadays because my city lacks dedicated bike lanes and cycling infrastructure. As a result, most people prefer driving cars for convenience and safety; for example, I rarely see commuters cycling to work during rush hour.

× Yes, I did. I remember when I was a child I had a big bicycle that my father bought that for my 15th birthday, so I was in love with this bike.

✓ Yes, I did. I remember when I was a child I had a big bicycle that my father bought me for my 15th birthday, so I was in love with that bike.

The original sentence uses 'bought that for my 15th birthday' which is incorrect word order and pronoun choice. Use the indirect object 'bought me' or restructure to 'bought it for me' to correctly show who received the bicycle. Also change 'this bike' to 'that bike' to maintain consistent past reference. Suggestion: use 'my father bought me a bicycle for my 15th birthday' or 'my father bought it for my 15th birthday.'

× Uh, narrow days, I think uh, bikes, uh, is not uh, use as well as uh, the past because around my city and there is not any line for a bicycle.

✓ These days, I think bikes are not used as much as in the past because around my city there are no bike lanes.

Multiple errors: 'narrow days' is a mispronunciation of 'these days'; 'bikes is' violates subject-verb agreement and tense—use plural verb 'are'; 'not use as well as the past' should be passive 'not used as much as in the past' to express general state; 'there is not any line for a bicycle' should be plural and natural as 'there are no bike lanes.' Suggestion: say 'These days, I think bikes are not used as much as in the past because there are no bike lanes in my city.'

× So uh, half of people or almost all of people, uh, use uh, their car.

✓ So, half of the people or almost all of the people use their cars.

'Half of people' and 'almost all of people' are unnatural; include 'the' to refer to a specific population: 'half of the people' or simply 'half the people.' Also 'their car' should be plural 'their cars' when referring to people individually owning cars. Suggestion: use 'half the people use their cars' or 'almost everyone uses a car.'