自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, correct tense and vocabulary, avoid fillers and repetition, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make your answer coherent. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was ten. My mother bought it for me when I was in grade five so I could ride to school. She also taught me how to ride, which made me feel more independent and allowed me to go to my friends’ houses after class.

建議: Answer directly, then support with clear reasons and one specific example. Minimize hesitations and correct grammar (use 'people drive cars' not 'they drive a car'). Use linking words (however, because, for example) to organize points. Keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars or motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for long distances. For example, I currently ride a motorbike to university, and in cities many commuters drive cars to work.

× Well, I have a bite when I was 10, I think, just as I remembered at the time, I was in grade 5 and my mom bought the the bike for me to, like, ride to school since she like teach me how to ride a bike. Yeah.

✓ Well, I had a bike when I was 10, I think. As I remember, I was in grade 5 and my mom bought the bike for me to ride to school since she wanted to teach me how to ride a bike.

The sentence mixes present tense with past events (use of 'have' and 'like teach') so past tense should be used consistently. Use 'had' for possession in the past, 'as I remember' (not 'just as I remembered at the time'), and 'wanted to teach' for past intent. Also remove the repeated 'the' and unnecessary fillers like 'like' to improve clarity. Suggestion: Keep past-tense verbs for actions that occurred in the past: 'had', 'was', 'bought', 'wanted to teach'. Break long run-on sentence into shorter sentences for clarity.

× While I think umm it's not really popular since most of the people they drive a car and sometimes they drive their motorbike and for me currently I drive my motorbike to my university and for some people like in the city they mostly use like car to drive to their work.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular because most people drive cars, and sometimes they ride motorbikes. I currently ride my motorbike to university, and in the city many people usually drive cars to work.

The original uses redundant or incorrect pronoun structures ('most of the people they drive') and inconsistent tense/word choice. Remove filler words and redundant pronouns: use 'most people drive' not 'most of the people they drive'. Use 'ride motorbikes' for motorcycles and 'ride my motorbike' for personal transport. 'To my university' -> 'to university' is more natural. 'Use like car to drive to their work' -> 'drive cars to work'. Suggestion: Avoid redundant pronouns and fillers, keep subject-verb concise ('most people drive cars'), and maintain consistent present-tense descriptions for current habits.