自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more consistent with verb tenses, avoid repetition, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) to connect ideas and keep the answer to no more than four sentences. Also replace awkward phrases like “this red colour bike” with natural expressions such as “a red bike.”

範例: I had a red bike when I was seven. I rode it everywhere— to the market and to buy snacks—because it was convenient and my favourite colour. I remember feeling very proud of it and often raced with my friends on weekends.

建議: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and plural forms), avoid redundancy, and provide a specific reason or example to support your claim. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail introduced by a linking phrase like “for example” or “because.” Keep it concise and natural.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many families own at least one bike, and people commonly use them to commute to work or go shopping.

× Yes, when I was seven years old I had this red colour bike and I go everywhere in this bike.

✓ Yes, when I was seven years old I had this red-coloured bike and I went everywhere on that bike.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses: 'had' is past but 'go' is present. Use past tense 'went' for actions in childhood. Also 'in this bike' is incorrect preposition; use 'on that bike' for riding a bike. 'Red colour' should be 'red-coloured' or 'red' as an adjective before a noun. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past when describing past habits and use correct preposition for riding a bike.

× I go to shopping and I go to buy snacks and this was my favorite colour, red, and I went to buy everything.

✓ I used to go shopping and buy snacks, and my favorite color was red, and I used to buy everything on it.

The student uses present tense 'go' when describing past habitual actions; use 'used to' or past simple 'went' to indicate habitual past actions. 'Go to shopping' is incorrect—use 'go shopping'. Maintain consistent past tense: 'my favorite color was red'. Also clarify 'buy everything' by indicating it was bought for or with the bike (here 'on it' refers to the bike) or rephrase to avoid ambiguity.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Everyone at least have one bike in their home.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Everyone at least has one bike in their home.

The subject 'everyone' is singular and requires the singular verb 'has', not 'have'. This is a subject-verb agreement error. Use 'has' to match the singular indefinite pronoun. Also 'at least' is better placed before 'has' or after 'everyone': 'Everyone at least has one bike' for clarity.

× They go everywhere with their bike.

✓ They go everywhere on their bikes.

While tense is acceptable, the preposition 'with' is less natural for riding; use 'on' and make 'bike' plural to match 'they' and 'their' referring to multiple people: 'their bikes'. This corrects collocation and number agreement.

× Even the girls have bike bike.

✓ Even the girls have bikes.

The repetition 'bike bike' is incorrect; remove duplication and use the plural 'bikes' to indicate multiple girls each having a bike. Also ensure noun plurality when referring generally to possession by many people.