自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and repetition. Also correct tense and phrasing (use past simple consistently).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small purple bicycle that my parents bought as a reward after I came first in a final exam. Because it was expensive for my family at the time, I remember it felt very special and I took great care of it.

建議: Answer directly, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words. Avoid hesitations and vague phrases like 'I'm actually not very sure how that's called.' Use precise vocabulary (e.g. 'bike-sharing services', 'dockless bikes'). Keep to two or three sentences max.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in China because bike-sharing services are widespread. For example, dockless bikes from companies like Ofo and Mobike can be found on many streets, and they often come in bright colors such as yellow and green, which makes them easy to spot.

× Yes, umm, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, umm, I had a bike when I was a child.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses past tense to describe a childhood possession.

× Uh, I remembered it's, it was a purple bike and it was small and at that time that was really expensive for me and for my family and it was a reward for me after I got, uh, like #1 in my, in, uh, in one of my final tests and.

✓ Uh, I remember it was a purple bike and it was small. At that time it was very expensive for me and my family, and it was a reward for me after I got first place in one of my final tests.

Problem types: 5 (Past tense issue) and 6 (Present tense issue). The student mixed past and present: 'I remembered' and 'it's' conflict with past narrative. Use simple past 'I remember' or 'I remembered' consistently; 'it's' should be 'it was'. Also sentence run-on: split into shorter sentences and replace informal '#1' with 'first place'. Use 'very' instead of 'really' for formality and clarity. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past) when telling past events, break long run-on sentences into shorter clauses, and use clear expressions for rankings.

× Yeah, absolutely yes.

✓ Yeah, absolutely.

Problem type: 6 (Present tense issue) — though not strictly a tense error, the phrase 'absolutely yes' is redundant. Use a concise response such as 'Yeah, absolutely.' Suggestions: avoid unnecessary repetition; use one strong affirmation.

× Uh, like in China you can see, uh, I'm actually not very sure how that's called, but I think it's like a, it's like sharing bike and stuff Like you can see them like everywhere on the street and sound they're of different colors, like some of them are yellow, some of them are umm, green and you.

✓ Uh, like in China you can see—I'm actually not very sure what they're called—but I think they are like shared bikes. You can see them everywhere on the street and they are different colors: some are yellow, some are green, and so on.

Problem types: 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns), 1 (Singular and plural issue), 26 (Sentence structure errors). Issues: 'how that's called' is incorrect; use 'what they're called' (pronoun and word order). 'sharing bike' should be 'shared bikes' (plural and adjective form). 'sound they're of different colors' is ungrammatical; use 'and they are different colors'. The sentence is run-on and disfluent; break into clearer sentences. Suggestions: use 'what' for asking the name, ensure noun plurality matches ('bikes' plural), and keep sentence structure simple.