自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details (who gave it, why you liked it, a short memory). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes — I had a pink Barbie bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. Because it was bright and lightweight, I felt confident and rode it almost every day after school.

建議: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and use linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'commuting' not 'commitment', 'many' not 'a lots of'). Limit to 3–4 sentences and include a brief example or contrast if possible.

範例: Bikes are fairly popular in my country for sport and leisure, but they are less common for daily commuting. This is mainly because big industrial cities have heavy traffic and unsafe cycling conditions. For example, in my city people prefer motorcycles or cars because dedicated bike lanes are rare and riding on busy roads feels dangerous.

× I really love to cycling with that and I have received it as a gift.

✓ I really love cycling on it and I received it as a gift.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form without 'to' (love + -ing), so 'love to cycling' is incorrect. Also, use 'cycling on it' instead of 'with that' for natural phrasing. Change 'have received' to simple past 'received' to match the past time reference of the sentence (you are describing a past event). Suggestion: say 'I really love cycling on it and I received it as a gift.'

× I had received it as a gift from my father.

✓ I received it as a gift from my father.

The past perfect 'had received' implies a prior past action relative to another past event; there is no later past event to justify past perfect here. Use simple past 'received' to state a past fact. Suggestion: use simple past when just narrating a past event without linking to an earlier past reference.

× I really love to cycling with that and I have received it as a gift.

✓ I really love cycling on it and I received it as a gift.

The preposition 'with' is odd in this context; we use 'on' with 'cycle' to indicate using the bike. 'Cycling with that' is unnatural. Use 'cycling on it'.

× You know, bikes are popular in my country as a sport but for the commitment the people cannot use that, especially in the industrial city which has a lots of traffic and it is dangerous to use the bike for transportation.

✓ You know, bikes are popular in my country as a sport, but because of work commitments people cannot use them, especially in industrial cities which have a lot of traffic, and it is dangerous to use bikes for transportation.

Multiple tense/number and word choice problems: 'for the commitment' is nonstandard; use 'because of work commitments' to express reason. 'the people' is unnecessary; use 'people'. 'cannot use that' is incorrect: 'that' should be plural 'them' (referring to bikes). 'industrial city' should be plural 'industrial cities' or 'in the industrial city' depending on meaning; here plural fits general statement. 'has a lots of traffic' has subject-verb and quantifier errors: 'cities have a lot of traffic' (no 's' on 'lot', and 'have' for plural). Finally, keep present simple for general facts. Suggestion: '...people cannot use them, especially in industrial cities which have a lot of traffic, and it is dangerous to use bikes for transportation.'

× especially in the industrial city which has a lots of traffic and it is dangerous to use the bike for transportation.

✓ especially in industrial cities which have a lot of traffic, and it is dangerous to use bikes for transportation.

There is a mismatch between singular/plural forms: 'the industrial city' (singular) then 'has a lots of traffic' (incorrect quantifier 'a lots') and later 'the bike' (singular) while referring generally to bikes. Use plural 'industrial cities', 'have', 'a lot of traffic', and 'bikes' to express generality. Suggestion: keep noun forms consistent when making general statements.

× especially in the industrial city which has a lots of traffic and it is dangerous to use the bike for transportation.

✓ especially in industrial cities which have a lot of traffic, and it is dangerous to use bikes for transportation.

The verb 'has' was used with the noun phrase 'industrial city' but other parts refer generally; when using plural 'cities' the verb must be 'have'. Also 'a lots' is wrong; use 'a lot' or 'lots of'. Suggestion: match subject number and verb: 'cities have'.