自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitation and use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (past tense), give one or two specific supporting details using linking words, and avoid repetition. Focus on clear vocabulary (e.g., “bike,” “birthday present,” “learned to ride”).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me as a birthday present, and I learned to ride on it in our neighborhood park. Because of that bike, I spent a lot of time outdoors and made many memories with friends.

建議: Answer directly and use accurate grammar and linking words to explain change over time. Provide a clear reason with a specific example (e.g., bike lanes, environmental concerns). Keep the response concise (max 4–5 sentences) and avoid filler words.

範例: They weren't very popular in the past, but in recent years cycling has become much more common. The city has built dedicated bike lanes and people cycle to avoid traffic and reduce pollution. As a result, biking is now a popular and practical way to travel.

× Yes uh, when I, uh, was, uh, child, uh, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a bike.

Article error: 'child' needs the definite/indefinite article 'a' when speaking about being a child. Tense agreement: the question asks about the past, so use past simple 'had' rather than present 'have'. Suggestion: include the article 'a' and use past tense: 'when I was a child, I had a bike.'

× Uh, it's this, which, uh, my parents, uh, give me a gift, uh, my birthday, uh, I like, uh, bike ride a bicycle because, uh, bicycle ride, reading bicycle, give me a.

✓ It was a gift from my parents for my birthday. I liked riding a bicycle because riding made me happy.

Multiple issues: verbs describing past events should be in past tense ('was', 'gave', 'liked', 'riding' as gerund after 'like'). Original uses present tense 'give' incorrectly. Also sentence structure is fragmented and unclear. Suggestion: reorganize into two clear past-tense sentences and use 'give' -> 'gave' and 'like' -> 'liked'. Use the gerund 'riding' after 'like'.

× Uh, not before, but uh, recently years, it's the most, uh, popular activity, right?

✓ Not before, but in recent years it has become the most popular activity.

Tense and phrasing: 'recently years' is incorrect; use 'recent years' or 'in recent years'. To describe a change leading to present state, use present perfect 'has become'. 'It's the most popular activity' is okay but better linked with 'has become'. Suggestion: say 'in recent years it has become the most popular activity.'

× The most popular activity, uh, is writing a bicycle, uh, because, uh, in our city have a bicycle, uh, way special for the reader and it is a.

✓ The most popular activity is riding bicycles because our city has special bicycle lanes for riders.

Verb form: 'writing a bicycle' is wrong; use 'riding a bicycle' (gerund) or 'riding bicycles'. Also subject-verb agreement and article issues: 'in our city have a bicycle way special' is ungrammatical. Use 'our city has special bicycle lanes' and 'for riders'. Suggestion: use 'riding' as the gerund, ensure subject-verb agreement ('our city has') and use 'bicycle lanes' or 'paths'.