自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make a direct, concise topic sentence that answers the question, then add one clear supporting reason. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (use past tense consistently). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and keep to at most 3–4 short sentences.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in a small town where owning a bike was uncommon because people relied on frequent and cheap public transport. So I usually went to school and other places by bus.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question. Use accurate vocabulary (bike, not 'bag') and add one or two specific reasons with linking words such as 'because' or 'for example'. Keep sentences short and check subject-verb agreement.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people ride bikes in parks for exercise, and commuters often cycle to work because it's cheap and convenient.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Because of when because of that, when I lived in a small town that it's hard to have, it's hard to have a back and we usually go to the destination by public transport.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I lived in a small town where it was hard to own one, and we usually went to places by public transport.

The original contains run-on fragments, redundant phrases and incorrect clause linking, causing sentence structure errors. Combine ideas into one or two coherent sentences and use appropriate relative clause 'where' to describe the town. Use past tense consistently (didn't have → was hard to own → went) and replace 'back' with 'one' for clarity. Suggestion: plan the sentence as subject + reason clause + result, and avoid repeating phrases like 'because of'.

× Yes, bags are very popular in my country since people usually take a bike in the park for near or commute to the office because it's very convenient and inexpensive.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country since people usually ride them in the park for short trips or commute to the office because they are convenient and inexpensive.

The original incorrectly used 'bags' instead of 'bikes' (word choice) and 'take a bike' is unnatural here; 'ride them' is correct. 'For near' is ungrammatical; use 'for short trips'. Maintain plural agreement ('bikes' and 'them') and use appropriate verbs ('ride' or 'use' rather than 'take'). Also ensure pronoun agreement: refer back to 'bikes' with 'they' or 'them'. Suggestion: choose correct noun, use 'ride' for bicycles, and use clear phrases like 'short trips' or 'around the neighborhood'.