自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Fix tense and article errors (e.g., “when I was a child”, “afford one”). Use a linking word to connect reason and result (for example, “so” or “therefore”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one at the time, so I usually walked to school or took public transport with my parents. As a result, I became used to long walks and public commuting.

建議: Give a clear main idea, then offer specific reasons or examples. Correct repetition and grammar mistakes, and use linking words (e.g., “because”, “however”, “for example”). Be specific about what kinds of bikes are popular and why (commuting, sport). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or school to avoid traffic. However, racing and mountain bikes are also well-liked because of cycling competitions and recreational riding.

× I did not own a bicycle when I was child.

✓ I did not own a bicycle when I was a child.

Missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'child'. The phrase should be 'a child' to indicate the speaker's state in childhood. Suggestion: include appropriate articles before singular countable nouns (e.g., 'a child').

× My family could not afford to at one at that time, so I usually walked to school or used public transport with my parents.

✓ My family could not afford one at that time, so I usually walked to school or used public transport with my parents.

Redundant and incorrect words 'to at one at' create an article/preposition error and word order problem. Replace the phrase with the correct noun phrase 'one' meaning 'a bicycle'. Suggestion: use 'afford one' or 'afford a bicycle' and keep simple word order.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because it is a because it helps us to reach anywhere easily.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they help us reach places easily.

Multiple issues: incorrect pronoun 'it' for plural 'bikes', awkward phrase 'a because it', and unnatural 'reach anywhere'. Use plural pronoun 'they', remove extra words, and use 'reach places' for natural English. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees with noun number and simplify clauses.

× But some bikes are most popular because riders are use uses bike by use bikes in the competitions.

✓ But some bikes are more popular because riders use them in competitions.

Problems include incorrect comparative 'most popular' without context (should be 'more popular'), incorrect verb form 'are use uses', and missing object pronoun for 'use'. Use correct verb 'use' for plural subject 'riders' and object pronoun 'them' referring to 'bikes'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, correct verb forms, and include appropriate pronouns; use 'more popular' when comparing within a group.