自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary words and contractions that cause hesitation. Mention a precise memory or age and one reason why the city was suitable for biking to make the answer more informative and natural.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle from about age seven until I was a teenager, because I grew up in Tokyo where many neighborhoods are flat and have safe bike lanes. For example, I used to cycle to school every day, which made it easy and convenient.

建議: Reduce hesitations and organize your answer: give a clear opinion, give two specific reasons using linking words, and finish with a concise conclusion or prediction. Replace filler words (umm, like) with pauses. Use precise language (e.g., "not very common," "convenient public transport").

範例: I don't think biking is very common in Hong Kong. Mainly, the public transport system is extremely convenient and the city is densely populated, so people prefer the metro or buses. Also, hilly terrain and limited bike lanes make cycling less practical. However, I think cycling is becoming more popular for leisure on weekends.

× Yes, I'd say I've only had a bike when I was a child and 'cause I was living in Tokyo throughout my upbringing and I'd say Tokyo's really bikeable city.

✓ Yes, I'd say I only had a bike when I was a child, because I lived in Tokyo throughout my upbringing, and I'd say Tokyo is a really bikeable city.

Errors: incorrect use of present perfect 'I've only had' with a past time reference 'when I was a child' (use simple past), unnecessary contraction ''cause' for 'because' in formal responses, and missing article before 'really bikeable city'. Suggestions: Use simple past 'I only had' for completed past situations, use 'because' in speech is fine but write 'because', and include 'a' before 'really bikeable city' to form a correct noun phrase.

× Umm, I don't think biking is that common in Hong Kong.

✓ Umm, I don't think biking is very common in Hong Kong.

Error: use of 'that' as an informal degree adverb is acceptable in speech but 'very' is clearer and more formal. Suggestion: use 'very' to express degree in formal or written responses.

× Umm, the, the metro system is too convenient that people really bike and umm, I feel like cycling it's more of a thing.

✓ Umm, the metro system is so convenient that people don't really bike, and I feel like cycling is more of a recreational activity.

Errors: misuse of 'too ... that'—the correct pattern is 'so ... that' to show cause and result; missing negation 'don't' to express that convenience reduces biking; awkward clause 'cycling it's more of a thing'—rewrite as 'cycling is more of a recreational activity' for clarity. Suggestions: Use 'so...that' for cause-effect, include necessary negation, and use clear noun phrase for 'more of a thing.'

× Umm, when?

✓ Umm, when? (This is an incomplete fragment; clarify what you mean, for example: 'When did I start cycling?')

Error: fragment lacking context or verb—this is a question fragment. Suggestion: Provide a complete question or clarify the intended meaning, e.g. 'When did I start cycling?' or 'When did that happen?'.