自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer clear, grammatical and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word choice (e.g., "when I was a child", "my parents bought me one", "to help me develop my balance"). Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child my parents bought me a bike to help me develop my balance. Because I practiced every day on quiet streets and in the park, I learned to ride confidently within a few weeks.

建議: Provide a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct grammar and singular/plural forms ("electric bicycles", "This is due to"). Expand with one concrete example or contrast to make your point stronger.

範例: Not really. In China many people prefer electric bicycles rather than traditional bikes because cities are larger and people want faster, less tiring commutes. For example, commuters often use e-bikes to travel longer distances between home and work, especially in modern urban areas.

× Of course, why was child? My parents bought me a one to let me develop the ability of balance and I also go to all lines to master this ability to drive a bike.

✓ Of course. Why 'child'? My parents bought me one to help me develop my sense of balance, and I also rode everywhere to practice riding a bike.

Errors: 'why was child?' is an unclear, ungrammatical phrase (sentence structure error). 'a one' is incorrect article usage with 'one' and noun omitted (article/word choice); corrected as 'one' meaning 'a bike'. 'develop the ability of balance' is unnatural; correct phrase is 'develop my sense of balance' (adjective/noun choice and preposition). 'I also go to all lines' is ungrammatical and unclear; intended meaning is likely 'I also rode everywhere' or 'I practiced everywhere' (verb tense and sentence structure). Verb tense adjusted to past ('bought', 'rode') to match question about childhood. Suggestion: Use clear sentence boundaries, choose appropriate nouns ('one' -> 'one (bike)' or simply 'one'), use natural collocations such as 'sense of balance' or 'balance' and match verbs to past context. Keep parallel structure in compound sentences ('bought me one... and I also rode...').

× In China the people prefer to commute with electrical bicycle instead of ordinary one.

✓ In China, people prefer to commute by electric bicycle instead of by an ordinary one.

Errors: 'the people' is awkward; use 'people' for general statements (pronoun/determiner use). 'electrical bicycle' is incorrect adjective form; correct collocation is 'electric bicycle' or 'electric bike' (adjective choice). 'commute with' should be 'commute by' when referring to a mode of transport (preposition error). 'ordinary one' needs an article 'an' when referring to 'an ordinary bicycle'. Suggestion: Use 'people' for generalizations, use correct adjective forms ('electric'), use 'commute by' + mode, and include articles when substituting nouns with 'one'.

× That attributed to the development and modernization of urban.

✓ That is due to the development and modernization of cities.

Errors: 'That attributed to...' is ungrammatical; passive/active structure is wrong (sentence structure). Use 'That is due to...' or 'This is because of...' to express cause. 'modernization of urban' lacks a noun after 'urban' — 'urban' is an adjective and needs a noun like 'areas' or 'cities' (word choice). Suggestion: Use clear causal expressions such as 'This is because of' or 'That is due to', and ensure adjectives have appropriate nouns ('urban areas' or 'cities').