自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear. Start with a concise topic sentence, correct key vocabulary (use "bike" not "back"), use past tense consistently and remove fillers (uh). Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, why you used it or how often).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in high school. It belonged to my uncle who lived next door, so he often lent it to me on weekends. Because I lived near school, I used it to commute and it saved me a lot of time.

建議: Organise your response with a clear topic sentence, avoid unnecessary facts and fillers, and use correct vocabulary ("bike" not "back"). Support your answer with one or two specific reasons and linking words (for example, "because" or "therefore").

範例: Yes, bikes are still very popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips because they are cheaper and easier to park than cars. Therefore, bikes remain a common and practical choice for daily commuting.

× Uh, yes, I had a back when I, uh, in my high school, uh, actually it's not mine.

✓ Uh, yes, I had a bike when I was in high school; actually it wasn't mine.

The original uses 'back' instead of 'bike' (wrong word) and omits the verb 'was' after 'I' for the time clause. This is a vocabulary error plus sentence structure: replace 'back' with 'bike' and use the past continuous/time expression 'I was in high school' or simply 'when I was in high school'. Also use 'wasn't' to match past tense and contraction for 'it was not'. Suggestion: Learn common noun vocabulary (bike) and use the full time clause 'when I was in high school' to make the sentence grammatical.

× Uh, my uncle, uh, the next door, uh, lend it to me.

✓ Uh, my uncle next door lent it to me.

Problems: 'the next door' is incorrect; use 'next door' as an adjectival phrase. Verb tense and agreement: 'lend' should be past 'lent' to match past context ('I had'). Also remove extra articles and filler words. Use 'my uncle next door' to indicate location. Suggestion: Use 'next door' without 'the' and use past simple 'lent' for actions completed in the past.

× Uh, yes. As you know, the Chinese population is now, uh, the second in the world and most of the poor people in this country cannot afford a car, so most of them try to, uh, commute, uh, by back.

✓ Uh, yes. As you know, China's population is now the second largest in the world, and many poor people in this country cannot afford a car, so most of them try to commute by bike.

Multiple issues: 'the Chinese population' is awkward; 'China's population' or 'the population of China' is better. Missing adjective 'largest' after 'second' to compare size. 'Most of the poor people' is wordy; use 'many poor people' or 'many of them'. 'Try to commute by back' repeats the earlier word-choice error: 'back' should be 'bike'. 'Try to commute' is acceptable in present tense, but combine clauses with proper commas and conjunctions. Suggestion: Use 'China's population is the second largest' for correct comparative expression; replace 'back' with 'bike'; use 'many' instead of 'most of the poor people' for natural phrasing; maintain consistent present tense here.