自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence answering the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Correct tense and word choice are important (e.g., use 'have' or 'own' instead of 'know about', use 'could only afford one' and 'rode it to school' or 'shared one bike'). Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

範例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. My family could only afford one bike, so I usually shared it with my older brother and rode it to school sometimes. When I couldn't use the bike, I took the bus or walked. Because of that, I didn’t learn to ride confidently until I was older.

建議: Answer directly and then give clear, specific reasons with correct vocabulary and linking phrases. Use plural agreement (‘bikes are’), avoid vague phrases like 'such communities and ends', and give concrete examples (commuting, short trips, exercise). Keep to 2–4 sentences and include linking words like 'because', 'for example', or 'moreover'.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for daily commuting and short errands. For example, students and office workers often cycle to avoid traffic and save money on transport. Additionally, cycling is promoted for health and environmental reasons, which has increased its popularity.

× No, I didn't know about it when I was outside.

✓ No, I didn't have one when I was a child.

The student used 'know about it' which is incorrect for possessing a bike. The correct meaning is possession in the past, so use 'have' in the past form 'didn't have' and replace the vague 'when I was outside' with the time reference from the question 'when I was a child'. This fixes misuse of pronoun/reference and clarifies meaning.

× My family could afford one at a time so I usually work it to school or use public transport.

✓ My family could only afford one bike, so I usually rode it to school or used public transport.

The original 'one at a time' is awkward; 'only afford one bike' expresses the intended limitation (quantifier issue). Verb tenses are past, so 'rode' and 'used' should be past tense to match 'could'. Also 'work it to school' is incorrect verb choice; use 'rode it to school'. This corrects quantifier and verb choice and aligns tenses.

× Yes, bike are quite popular in my country because many people use them for such communities and ends.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and short trips.

The noun 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to agree with 'are' (singular/plural issue). The phrase 'for such communities and ends' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'for commuting and short trips'. Replacing with 'commuting and short trips' fixes meaning and collocation.