自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb tenses and simpler sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and keep to no more than 4–5 short sentences. For example, say when you got the bike, why you liked it, and one specific memory of riding it.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I got it when I was six and learned to ride on the quiet streets near my home. Because I could ride well, I often rode back to my hometown to visit relatives on weekends. Those rides made me feel free and confident.

建議: Clarify meaning and use correct tense and vocabulary. Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with specific comparisons and reasons using linking words (for example, "in Japan" vs "in Korea"). Correct common errors: say "when I was in Japan" and "I didn't see many cyclists". Keep sentences concise and logical.

範例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. When I lived in Japan, I didn’t see many cyclists on the roads, and in Korea most people prefer buses or cars. As a result, cycling infrastructure is limited, which makes it less convenient to ride a bike.

× Yes, of course, I haven't buy it since when I was six years old.

✓ Yes, of course, I have had it since I was six years old.

The student used 'haven't buy' which mixes the present perfect auxiliary with the base form instead of the past participle. Use 'have had' to express possession continuing from the past to the present. Also 'since when' is redundant; use 'since' plus a point in time. Suggestion: use 'have/has' + past participle for present perfect and use 'since' with a specific time.

× Maybe I love bikes, bikes because my ability of riding bike was special.

✓ Maybe I love bikes because my ability to ride a bike was special.

Errors: repetition of 'bikes, bikes', incorrect noun phrase 'ability of riding bike' and missing article before 'bike'. Use 'ability to do something' and use the infinitive 'to ride'. Also include the indefinite article 'a bike'. Suggestion: avoid repeating words and use 'ability to + verb' construction and correct articles.

× So I would like to run go hometown.

✓ So I would like to go back to my hometown.

The phrase 'run go hometown' is ungrammatical; it mixes verbs without connectors. Use the fixed expression 'go back to my hometown' to express returning. 'Would like to' should be followed by the base verb 'go'. Suggestion: keep verb forms simple after 'would like to' and use correct prepositions ('to my hometown').

× Actually, I don't think so.

✓ Actually, I don't think so.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and fits the context; no change needed. Keep the negative present simple 'don't think' to express current opinion.

× When I was sleep in Japan, I can't see the bikers so much, so much in there.

✓ When I was living in Japan, I didn't see many cyclists there.

Errors: 'was sleep' is wrong — use 'was sleeping' or better 'was living' for residence. Mixing past ('was') with present 'can't see' is incorrect; both should be past: 'didn't see'. 'Bikers' is colloquial and 'so much, so much' is redundant. Use 'many cyclists' and place 'there' at the end. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and use correct quantifier 'many' with countable plural nouns.

× But in Korea, the first seems like more love bus or cars than cycles.

✓ But in Korea, people seem to prefer buses or cars to bicycles.

Original has unclear subject 'the first' and incorrect comparative structure 'more love bus or cars than cycles'. Use 'people seem to prefer X to Y' or 'prefer buses or cars to bicycles'. Use plural nouns 'buses, cars, bicycles'. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' for comparisons of preference and a clear subject.

× Yeah, it's so sad for me.

✓ Yes, it's very sad for me.

'Yeah' is informal; 'so sad' is acceptable but 'very sad' is slightly more formal and clearer in this context. No major grammar error, but choose vocabulary appropriate to register. Suggestion: use 'yes' and 'very' in semi-formal speech.