自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer, more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I did.), give accurate age (avoid hesitations), use past tense consistently, correct common errors (e.g. 'a little hard', 'I fell', 'then I learned to ride it'), and keep within 3–4 sentences. Add one specific supporting detail (where you rode or a memorable incident) and use linking words like 'At first' or 'after a while'.

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about eight years old and my dad taught me to ride it. At first it was a little hard and I fell several times, but after a week I became confident and loved cycling around the park near our house.

建議: Give a direct, fluent response and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence ('Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country.'), then add one or two specific supporting points using linking words like 'because' or 'for example' (e.g., popularity among students, availability of bike lanes, or cultural factors). Use correct vocabulary ('ride bikes' not 'write backs') and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. For example, many students cycle to school and cities have improved bike lanes, which makes cycling a convenient and affordable option.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was UH-8 around 810 years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was around 8 or 10 years old.

The student used 'did have' which is grammatically possible but unnecessary in a simple past statement; more importantly the age phrase 'UH-8 around 810 years old' is incorrect and unclear. It should be a simple age range 'around 8 or 10 years old.' Use simple past 'had' for possession in past time and give a clear numeric age. Suggestion: say 'I had a bike when I was about 8 or 10 years old.'

× My dad taught me how to ride it.

✓ My dad taught me how to ride it.

This sentence is correct. It properly uses the simple past 'taught' for a completed action in the past and needs no change.

× At first it was little hard, I fall multiple times of course, but then I learned how to and I really enjoyed it.

✓ At first it was a little hard; I fell multiple times, of course, but then I learned how to ride it and I really enjoyed it.

Multiple past-tense errors: 'was little hard' needs article 'a' -> 'was a little hard.' 'I fall' is present tense; past tense 'fell' is required. 'learned how to' is incomplete—add the object 'ride it.' Also use punctuation to separate clauses. Suggestions: ensure all verbs describing past events use past tense and include necessary articles and objects.

× Back time.

✓ Those are my memories from that time.

'Back time' is not a grammatical English phrase. It lacks structure and context. Provide a full sentence conveying the intended meaning, for example 'Those are my memories from that time' or 'That was back then.' Suggestion: avoid fragmentary phrases and use complete sentences.

× Actually yes it is.

✓ Actually, yes, they are.

The question asked about 'bikes' (plural), so the subject is plural; the student replied with singular verb 'it is.' Change to plural pronoun 'they' and verb 'are' to agree with 'bikes.' Also add commas for natural pause.

× Uh, a lot of young people write backs.

✓ A lot of young people ride bikes.

'Write backs' is a mispronunciation or incorrect word choice. The intended verb is 'ride' and the object 'bikes.' Use present simple 'ride' for general statements about habits. Suggestion: say 'A lot of young people ride bikes.'

× Umm, it's pretty popular the the age like.

✓ Umm, it's pretty popular among people of that age.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains word repetition 'the the' and unclear phrase 'age like.' Use the preposition 'among' to indicate a group and 'people of that age' to clarify. Suggestion: 'It's pretty popular among people of that age.'