自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn, rõ cấu trúc chủ đề -> chi tiết hỗ trợ, và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Cụ thể: 1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, ví dụ “Yes, I did.” 2) Dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán (bought, spent) và sửa cấu trúc “With the high school I have sent” sang cụm đúng như “when I was in high school”. 3) Rút gọn chi tiết không cần thiết, sử dụng liên từ phù hợp (for example, so, and) để giúp mạch văn mượt. 4) Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, tránh lặp từ (“bike” nhiều lần).

範例: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a bike as a reward when I passed an important exam. When I was in high school, I often spent whole afternoons riding it around the yard and exploring nearby streets, which made me feel independent and happy.

建議: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần chính xác, tự nhiên và cụ thể hơn. Cụ thể: 1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp: “Yes, they are” hoặc “Yes, bicycles are popular.” 2) Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (use plural “bicycles”, “vehicle” → “vehicles”, tránh biểu đạt lặp “for everyone to go to everyone”). 3) Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: reasons like cost, traffic, environment) liên kết bằng từ nối như “because” hoặc “for example”. 4) Giữ 2–3 câu, dùng từ vựng phù hợp như “affordable”, “practical”, “environmentally friendly”.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or to run errands in busy city areas, and they are also seen as an environmentally friendly option.

× With the high school I have sent, I have spent the whole day to ride it around my yard.

✓ When I was in high school, I spent whole days riding it around my yard.

The original sentence uses incorrect verb forms and tense combinations ('have sent' and 'have spent' are incorrect here). Use simple past 'was' and 'spent' to describe past habitual actions. Change 'to ride' to the gerund 'riding' after 'spent' and replace 'the whole day' with 'whole days' to match habitual past. Suggestion: use 'When I was in high school' to indicate time, 'I spent whole days riding' for repeated past actions.

× Yes, bicycle is one of the most common vehicle in our country, which is very convenient for everyone to go to everyone and it's affordable too.

✓ Yes, the bicycle is one of the most common vehicles in our country; it is very convenient for people to get around and it is affordable, too.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'bicycle' and singular/plural mismatch 'vehicle' should be 'vehicles' after 'one of the'. The relative clause 'which is very convenient for everyone to go to everyone' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'it is very convenient for people to get around'. Also expand contractions for clarity and ensure parallel structure. Suggestions: use 'the bicycle' when speaking generally about a class of object, use plural after 'one of the', and use clear verbs like 'get around'.

× Yes, bicycle is one of the most common vehicle in our country, which is very convenient for everyone to go to everyone and it's affordable too.

✓ Yes, the bicycle is one of the most common vehicles in our country; it is very convenient for people to get around and it is affordable, too.

'Bicycle' needs the article 'the' when referring to the type generally, and 'vehicle' should be plural 'vehicles' because the phrase 'one of the' requires a plural noun. Keep nouns consistent in number. Suggestion: after 'one of the' always use a plural noun.

× With the high school I have sent, I have spent the whole day to ride it around my yard.

✓ When I was in high school, I spent whole days riding it around my yard.

After 'spend' when referring to time, use the -ing form ('spending/ riding'), not 'to ride'. Also use simple past for completed past habits. Suggestion: use 'spent... riding' to describe how time was used.

× With the high school I have sent, I have spent the whole day to ride it around my yard.

✓ When I was in high school, I spent whole days riding it around my yard.

The phrase 'With the high school I have sent' is ungrammatical and likely a mistaken literal translation. Better structure is 'When I was in high school' to indicate time. Simplify and reorder to subject + past verb + object/complement. Suggestion: use clear temporal clause 'When I was in high school'.