自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make tense consistent, correct grammar, be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (since question asks about childhood), then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I had my own bike when I was a child. I used it every day to ride to school and later rode it in the park with my friends, which helped me learn balance and confidence.

建議: Answer directly and coherently. Use singular/plural correctly and avoid unclear fragments. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give a specific reason or example using a linking word. Remove hesitations and irrelevant repetition.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For example, when I was at university I often rode a BMX to get around campus and for weekend rides with friends.

× Yes, I do have my own bike.

✓ Yes, I had my own bike.

The examiner asked about having a bike when you were a child (past time). The original sentence uses present tense 'do have', which conflicts with the past context. Change to simple past 'had' to match the time reference. Suggestion: anchor verbs to the time phrase 'when I was a child' (e.g., 'I had').

× When I was a child I always use my bike to go to school and play with my friends.

✓ When I was a child I always used my bike to go to school and play with my friends.

The sentence describes habitual actions in the past but uses present simple 'use'. Use past simple 'used' for past habitual actions. Suggestion: replace present-tense verbs with past-tense forms when the time reference is in the past ('always used').

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my countries.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The noun 'countries' is plural but the speaker likely means their own single country. Use singular 'country' to match the possessive 'my' referring to one country. If the speaker truly means multiple countries, rephrase to 'in my countries' with context. Suggestion: check number agreement between possessive and noun.

× There are different type of bikes that available here in many countries.

✓ There are different types of bikes available here.

Two issues: 'type' should be plural 'types' when preceded by 'different', and the clause 'that available here in many countries' is ungrammatical. Removing 'that' and simplifying to 'available here' fixes the sentence and keeps it appropriate to the speaker's country context. Suggestion: use 'different types of' and place 'available' after the noun without an unnecessary relative pronoun.

× In fact, when I was studying in universities, I used to have a BMX bicycle, so I will.

✓ In fact, when I was studying at university, I used to have a BMX bicycle.

Multiple problems: 'studying in universities' is awkward—use 'studying at university' or 'at university' for a single course of study; 'used to have' correctly indicates a past habitual possession, but 'so I will' is incomplete and wrongly mixes future. Remove 'so I will' which is unnecessary and incorrect. Suggestion: use 'at university' and delete stray future clause.

× So I would uh, use my BMX cycles to play at.

✓ So I would, uh, use my BMX to play around.

The original ends with the preposition 'at' with no object and uses 'cycles' awkwardly. 'BMX' as a noun can refer to the bike; 'use my BMX to play around' is a natural phrasing. Also the filler 'uh' is fine in speech but should be set off with commas if written. Suggestion: remove dangling preposition and use appropriate verb phrase 'play around' or 'ride around'.