自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., “Me and my friends” → “My friends and I”; remove repeated fillers like “used to” and “for”). Keep to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

範例: I did. As a child, I loved riding my bike and rode it every day with my friends. For example, we often cycled to the local shop to buy toys or CDs, and we also practiced tricks in my backyard. Riding was my favorite pastime because it was fun and helped me stay active.

建議: Make your opinion direct, support it with specific reasons and avoid vague or exaggerated claims. Use linking words (e.g., “however”, “because”, “for example”) and correct phrasing (“bike riding” not “bike the ride the bike”). Reduce hesitation and filler words to sound more fluent.

範例: I think bikes were more popular in the past, but they are less common now. For example, when I was a child many families encouraged cycling for kids, but nowadays people prefer cars or stay indoors using the Internet. Consequently, bike riding has declined because people spend more time online and have less free time for outdoor activities.

× Me and my friends went out for, for buying toys, CDs.

✓ My friends and I went out to buy toys and CDs.

Use 'My friends and I' as the subject instead of 'Me and my friends' which uses an object pronoun incorrectly. Use the infinitive 'to buy' rather than 'for buying' after 'went out'. Remove the repeated filler 'for, for'. Suggestions: practice using subject pronouns in subject position and use 'went out to + verb' for purpose.

× I used to go to at my backyard and having a bike ride.

✓ I used to go out to my backyard and have a bike ride.

The phrase 'go to at my backyard' mixes two prepositions; use 'out to my backyard' or simply 'to my backyard'. After 'used to' use the base verb 'have' not the gerund 'having'. Suggestions: avoid stacking prepositions and remember 'used to' is followed by the base form of the verb.

× I used to, I used to go to at my backyard and having a bike ride.

✓ I used to go to my backyard and have a bike ride.

After 'used to' the verb should be in base form ('have'), not '-ing'. Also remove redundant repetition of 'I used to'. Suggestions: when expressing habitual past actions use 'used to' + base verb once.

× I think bikes used to be popular in my country back when Internet wasn't in everybody's hands.

✓ I think bikes used to be popular in my country back when the Internet wasn't in everyone's hands.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'Internet' to refer to the global system. Use the correct possessive form 'everyone's' instead of 'everybody's hands' for natural phrasing. Suggestions: use 'the Internet' and the possessive 'everyone's' for general statements.

× And what now? I don't see people riding a bike usually.

✓ And now? I usually don't see people riding bikes.

'And what now?' is unnatural; 'And now?' is simpler. Place the adverb 'usually' before the main verb or after the subject: 'I usually don't see'. Use plural 'bikes' for general statements about people riding them. Suggestions: position adverbs like 'usually' before the main verb and use plural when speaking generally.

× It disappeared because now everybody is so much into Internet that they don't have the time to bike the ride the bike.

✓ Biking has declined because now everyone is so into the Internet that they don't have time to ride a bike.

'It disappeared' is vague; use 'Biking has declined' for clarity. 'Everybody is so much into Internet' needs 'the Internet' and 'so into the Internet' is more natural. Remove the redundant phrase 'bike the ride the bike' and use 'ride a bike'. Use 'everyone' instead of 'everybody' for a smoother tone. Suggestions: use clear subject like 'biking' or 'cycling' and avoid repetition; use 'ride a bike' for the activity.