自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (past tense and verb forms), simplify and make sentence structure natural. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and filler words.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I walked to school. My house was very close to the school, so I didn’t need one, and I was usually busy with classes and after-school activities.

建議: Work on pronunciation and word choice (e.g., say 'bike' not 'bug'), use more precise vocabulary and add coherent linking words. Give one clear reason and a specific example or observation. Keep it concise and avoid fillers like 'umm' and 'uh'.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many parents bike their children to school, and adults often use bikes to commute to work in busy city areas.

× No, I haven't a bike when I were a child because that moment I I was busy with in school and my home was closed to the school so I don't need to need a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because at that time I was busy with school and my home was close to the school, so I didn't need a bike.

Multiple past-tense errors: 'haven't' is present tense and incorrect; use past 'didn't have'. 'were' should be 'was' to match singular subject 'I'. 'that moment' is unnatural; use 'at that time'. 'busy with in school' should be 'busy with school' or 'busy at school'. 'closed to the school' is wrong preposition and form; use 'close to the school'. 'don't need' should be past 'didn't need' to match the past context. Suggest practicing past simple forms and subject-verb agreement in past statements; pay attention to time markers that require past tense.

× Yeah, absolutely. It's very popular in my country because umm, bug is convenient in our daily lives, uh, not only to work but also to school.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. Bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient in our daily lives, not only for work but also for going to school.

'It's' refers to singular; use plural 'Bikes are' or refer with plural pronoun 'they'. 'bug' is a mispronunciation/typo and should be 'bikes'. 'convenient in our daily lives' is acceptable but better 'convenient for our daily lives'. Prepositions: 'to work' is fine but parallel structure needs 'for work' and 'for going to school' or 'for school'. Use gerund 'going to school' to express purpose. Suggest focusing on noun-pronoun agreement, correct noun forms, and parallel prepositional phrases.

× So it's very popular because I saw many people including children, adult.

✓ So they are very popular because I saw many people including children and adults.

Singular 'it's' should match plural 'bikes'—use 'they are' or 'they're'. 'adult' is singular; should be plural 'adults' to match 'many people'. Also add 'and' for correct listing. Suggest ensuring plural forms for countable nouns when referring to multiple people and matching pronouns to noun number.