自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (you are talking about childhood). Keep answer concise (1–3 sentences), then add one specific supporting detail using a linking phrase. Fix common errors: use past tense (“didn’t have”), correct verb forms (“I lived”), remove filler sounds, and use clear connectors (for example, “because” or “so”).

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I lived in a small urban apartment with no safe place to ride. Also, my parents worked long hours, so they didn’t have time to take me out and teach me.

建議: Answer directly and expand with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Use present tense for general statements (e.g., “are popular”). Avoid repetition and correct grammar: use “I said earlier” or “as I mentioned” and say “people prefer cars or motorcycles.” Provide a brief comparison or example to support your view.

範例: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. As I mentioned, in cities most people prefer cars or motorcycles because roads are busy and cycling lanes are rare, so biking is not convenient for daily travel.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child because since I was born I'm live in, I was live in urban place and there are there are no place to let me play bicycle and my parents also busy on job. MMM they are ready to Take Me Out and teach me.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because since I was born I have lived in an urban area and there were no places for me to ride a bicycle, and my parents were also busy with work. They were not able to take me out and teach me.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'don't have' is present tense while the time reference is past, so use past tense 'didn't have' (Problem ID 6). 'I'm live in' and 'I was live in' are incorrect verb forms; use present perfect 'have lived' to express a situation from birth to now, or simple past 'lived' for past period (Problem ID 9/6); choose 'have lived' here because of 'since I was born'. 'urban place' should be 'an urban area' (article and noun choice; Problem ID 22 and 11). 'there are there are no place' has plural mismatch and repetition: use 'there were no places' to match past reference (Problem ID 1 and 5). 'to let me play bicycle' is wrong verb and phrasing; use 'for me to ride a bicycle' (Problem ID 8 and 11). 'my parents also busy on job' needs verb and preposition: 'my parents were also busy with work' (Problem ID 6 and 11). 'they are ready to Take Me Out and teach me' conflicts with previous meaning and tense; use 'They were not able to take me out and teach me' to reflect inability in past (Problem ID 6 and 4 if modal implied). Suggestion: keep consistent past reference for childhood, use correct verb forms (didn't have, have lived), correct articles ('an'), use plural nouns when appropriate ('places'), and use natural verbs for activities ('ride a bicycle', 'busy with work').

× No, because I already say that I was live in a urban place and then so that everyone was take a car or motorcycle in a route so. Uh.

✓ No, because I already said that I lived in an urban area and so everyone took a car or motorcycle on the road.

Tense and verb form errors: 'I already say' uses present tense; when referring to a past statement use past tense 'I already said' (Problem ID 5). 'I was live in a urban place' uses incorrect verb and article; use 'I lived in an urban area' (Problem ID 6 and 22). 'everyone was take a car or motorcycle' is wrong auxiliary and main verb; use past simple 'everyone took a car or motorcycle' to describe habitual past action (Problem ID 5). 'in a route' is unnatural; use 'on the road' or 'on the street' (preposition and collocation error; Problem ID 11). Suggestion: use simple past for completed past actions, correct verb forms ('said', 'lived', 'took'), use 'an urban area', and prefer natural collocations like 'on the road'.