自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, avoid fillers (uh), and use a clear topic sentence with 1–2 specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct word order. For example, replace “used to uh, from bike, uh, go” with “I used to ride it to school and the market.” Limit to 1–3 short sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to school and to the market every day, which saved time and let me exercise regularly.

建議: Give a clear reasoned response using linking words and specific details. Avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a topic sentence, then explain with 1–2 specific reasons and an example. Use correct grammar: “help reduce traffic” and “improve people’s health.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they help reduce traffic congestion and promote physical fitness. For instance, many people cycle to work in cities to avoid traffic jams and get daily exercise.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I used to uh, from bike, uh, go to the market and go to school and so.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I used to ride it to the market and to school.

The sentence shows incorrect verb choice and awkward phrasing. 'Used to' requires the base verb form; the verb for riding a bicycle is 'ride'. The original 'from bike' is ungrammatical and should be removed. Also add 'it' to refer to the bike and parallel structure 'to the market and to school' improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'used to ride it to the market and to school.'

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because uh bikes, uh, helped them, helped for uh, people's, uh, for uh, from traffic and healthy.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they help reduce traffic and improve people's health.

The original uses incorrect pronoun 'them' and awkward phrases 'helped for people's' and 'for from traffic and healthy.' Use 'they' to refer to 'bikes' (plural). Use present simple 'help' because this is a general truth. Replace 'reduce traffic' for 'from traffic' and 'improve people's health' for 'healthy.' Suggestion: say 'they help reduce traffic and improve people's health.'