自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (past tense and word order), clarity and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid repetition and keep to under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because my school was far from home. For example, the walk took about 40 minutes each way, so my parents bought a bicycle to save time and make my commute easier.

建議: Use correct subject-verb agreement and comparative language, and be more specific with reasons and examples. Begin with a direct opinion, then give two clear, linked reasons with supporting detail. Use appropriate vocabulary (cheaper, bicycles, motorcycles) and avoid absolute claims unless supported.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much cheaper to buy and run than cars. Additionally, they are convenient in busy cities where traffic is heavy, so many people choose motorcycles or bicycles for daily commutes.

× Yes, I do have a bike in my childhood because of my school way.

✓ Yes, I had a bike in my childhood because of the route to my school.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use past tense 'had' instead of present 'do have'. Also 'school way' is incorrect phrasing; 'route to my school' or 'way to school' is correct. Use past tense to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use 'had' for past possession and replace 'school way' with 'route to my school' or 'way to school'.

× I am going on school before my bike on my my feet.

✓ I used to go to school before on my bike instead of walking on my feet.

The original mixes present progressive with past context and has incorrect word order and redundancy ('my my feet'). The situation refers to a habitual past action, so 'used to' or simple past 'I went' is appropriate. Also 'walking on my feet' is awkward; 'walking' suffices. Better: 'I used to go to school by bike instead of walking.' Suggestion: Use 'I used to go to school by bike instead of walking' to express past habitual actions clearly.

× It is a long distance from my school to my home and that's why I buy bike.

✓ It was a long distance from my school to my home, and that's why I bought a bike.

The sentence refers to a past situation, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'was' (not 'is') and 'bought' (past of 'buy') rather than present 'buy'. Also include an article: 'a bike'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past situations and include the indefinite article before singular countable nouns.

× I think it is very popular in my country because it is very cheapest as compared to other vehicles like car, car cycles and motorcycles.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are much cheaper compared to other vehicles like cars, bicycles and motorcycles.

The student switches between singular 'it' and plural contexts; since 'bikes' is plural, use 'they are'. 'Very cheapest' is incorrect; use comparative 'much cheaper' or 'cheaper' not 'cheapest' when comparing to other vehicles. Also 'car cycles' is incorrect; use 'bicycles' and pluralize 'car' to 'cars'. Suggestion: Match number (plural) and use correct comparative form 'cheaper' with an appropriate modifier if desired ('much cheaper').

× Motorbikes is easy to buy for every person and I think every person have a bike in my home country.

✓ Motorbikes are easy to buy for most people, and I think many people have a bike in my country.

Subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'Motorbikes' requires plural verb 'are' not 'is'. Also 'every person have' is incorrect; with 'every person' use singular verb 'has', but it's more natural to say 'many people have' or 'most people have'. 'In my home country' can be shortened to 'in my country'. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with their subjects ('are' for plural), and choose natural quantifiers ('many' or 'most') with plural nouns and verbs ('have').