自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장이 거의 의미를 전달하지 못하고 문법과 단어 선택이 많이 어긋나 있습니다. 우선 질문에 바로 답하는 주제문(예: Yes, I did / No, I didn't)을 말한 뒤, 간단한 이유나 기억(예: who gave it to you, how often you rode it, a memorable experience)을 1~2개의 문장으로 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 문장의 흐름을 자연스럽게 만들어야 합니다. 또한 시제와 대명사 사용을 점검하고, 불필요한 단어(예: unrelated nouns)를 제거하세요.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bike when I was seven because they wanted me to exercise more. I rode it almost every day after school, and I remember learning to balance with training wheels before I finally rode on my own.

建議: 답의 핵심은 ‘Yes, I do’로 시작해야 하지만 추가 설명이 불분명합니다. 구체적인 근거(예: bike lanes, commuting habits, climate, culture)를 1~2문장으로 제시하고, 비교나 예시를 덧붙이세요. 또한 지명이나 표현을 사용할 때는 정확한 단어를 사용하고, 불분명한 발음이나 잘못된 단어는 피해야 합니다. 연결어(and, because, for example)를 이용해 문장을 논리적으로 이어가세요.

範例: Yes, I do. Bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances and there are dedicated bike lanes in cities. For example, students and office workers often cycle to school or work to avoid traffic and save money.

× Why was that house in prosecutor with training Thursday?

✓ Why was that house in the prosecutor's area for training on Thursday?

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing possessive and preposition usage. Use possessive form 'prosecutor's' to show the area belonging to the prosecutor, use 'in' -> 'in the prosecutor's area' or 'at the prosecutor's office', and include the preposition 'on' before a day. Also 'for training' clarifies purpose. Suggestion: reorganize sentence into Subject + Verb + Location + Purpose + Time.

× For me, I can.

✓ As for me, I can.

This is a minor connective issue. 'For me' can be used, but 'As for me' is more natural when introducing a personal ability or opinion. Keep the modal 'can' with an implied verb if context provides it; otherwise specify the action (e.g., 'I can do that').

× He knows me to write and we put things together and thinking.

✓ He knows that I can write, and we put things together and think.

The phrase 'knows me to write' is ungrammatical; use 'knows that I can write' or 'knows me as a writer.' Also maintain parallel verb forms: 'put things together and think' (base form), not 'and thinking.' Ensure conjunction 'and' connects verbs in the same form.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

The sentence needs a comma after 'Yes' for natural written style, although grammatically it's acceptable. No verb agreement error here; included for clarity. (If responding to 'Do you think...' the short answer 'Yes, I do.' is appropriate.)

× I think bikes are popular by country because my country is on Bogdong country.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because my country is in Bogdong.

Use 'in' with 'country' to indicate location: 'popular in my country.' 'By country' is incorrect. Also avoid repeating 'country' twice; say 'my country is in Bogdong.' Use 'in' to show a region contains the country.

× You know, unbukedong is like todo.

✓ You know, Unbukedong is like Todo.

Proper nouns should be capitalized. The original sentence is vague: 'is like Todo' may be fine if Todo is a comparable place; ensure consistent capitalization. If 'todo' was intended as 'a lot to do' then correction would be 'has a lot to do.' Clarify intended meaning. Here adjusted only for capitalization and sentence clarity.