自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Remove repetition and filler words, and use correct past tense forms (e.g., "taught" not "teach"). Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., "learned to ride" instead of "ride the bike").

範例: Yes, I did. I received my first bike when I was three years old, and my father taught me how to ride it. I remember practicing in our quiet neighborhood park until I felt confident riding on the road.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason and an example. Avoid filler words and use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "also") to make the answer coherent. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "cycle"/"cycling lanes"/"routes") and mention who uses bikes or where they are popular.

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many cities have wide cycling lanes and safe roads. For example, commuters and students often cycle to work or school, especially in the mornings when traffic is heavy.

× I got it when I was three years old and my dad and my dad, uh, teach me how to ride the bike.

✓ I got it when I was three years old and my dad taught me how to ride the bike.

The sentence repeats 'my dad' (redundant) and mixes past tense 'got' with present tense 'teach'. The conjunction 'and' joins two actions that both happened in the past, so the verb after 'and' should be past tense ('taught'). Remove the duplicated phrase and use consistent past tense. Suggestion: keep parallel verb tenses and avoid repetition: 'I got it when I was three and my dad taught me to ride it.'

× Yes, they are really popular because we have a lot of, uh, roads to drive the bike on.

✓ Yes, they are really popular because we have a lot of roads to ride bikes on.

Using 'drive the bike on' is unnatural: we usually 'ride' bikes, not 'drive' them, and the preposition placement is awkward. Also 'the bike' implies a specific bike; plural 'bikes' fits general statement. Better: 'roads to ride bikes on' or rephrase to avoid ending with a preposition: 'roads on which to ride bikes.'