自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (past tense and avoid 'used to' errors), give a clear direct topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences). For example, say when you were a child, whether you had a bike, why or why not, and briefly mention any related memory.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to school because my family couldn’t afford one. As a result, I spent a lot of time outdoors with friends, which helped me become very active.

建議: Provide a clear direct answer, fix grammar (subject-verb agreement), use linking words to explain reasons, and give a specific example or comparison. Be concise and avoid fillers like 'uh' or vague phrases such as 'you know'.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many streets are narrow and congested, so they are easier to use than cars. For example, in old city centers most people prefer scooters or bicycles for short trips, especially for commuting to work or shopping.

× When I was outside, I didn't used to have a riding bike like adult Gary because I don't have a driving license and so I don't used to have.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't use to have a bike like adult Gary because I didn't have a driving licence, so I didn't use to have one.

The sentence mixes past and present incorrectly and uses the nonstandard form 'didn't used to'. With 'did' the base form 'use' must follow: 'didn't use to'. Also the time reference is 'when I was a child' rather than 'when I was outside'. Maintain past tense for the whole explanation: 'didn't have' for not having a licence and 'didn't use to have one' for habitual lack. Clarify nouns: 'bike' instead of 'riding bike' and 'one' to avoid repetition.

× Yeah, bike is popular in my country because, uh, my country have small roads and uh.

✓ Yeah, bikes are popular in my country because my country has narrow roads.

Use plural 'bikes are' to match general statement about popularity. Subject-verb agreement: 'my country has' (singular subject with singular verb). 'Small roads' is better phrased 'narrow roads' for clarity. Remove filler words for a cleaner sentence.

× More than other, you know, bikes. All other vehicles bike is so.

✓ Compared with other vehicles, bikes are the most common.

The original is fragmented and unclear. Recast as a complete comparative sentence: 'Compared with other vehicles, bikes are the most common.' This fixes sentence fragments and clarifies the intended meaning about bikes being more common than other vehicles.