自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g., “it fell vibrating”) and unnecessary repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “because,” “so,” “which”). Keep to no more than five sentences.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was six; it was red and black and had a small bell. I rode it around the neighborhood every afternoon because it was fun and helped me meet other children. As a result, I made many friends and became more confident playing outside.

建議: Improve accuracy and variety of vocabulary and use clearer linking words. Correct misused words (e.g., “rise by” should be “ride bikes” or “cycle”). Provide a topic sentence, then specific reasons and an example linked with connectors like “because,” “for example,” and “so.”

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people ride them to commute because cycling helps avoid traffic and saves money, and others cycle for exercise and enjoyment. For example, you can see large groups cycling together in city parks on weekends, which shows how widespread cycling culture has become.

× I often rode it around the neighborhood every afternoon because it fell vibrating and helped me to make friends with other children in the neighborhood.

✓ I often rode it around the neighborhood every afternoon because it kept vibrating and helped me make friends with other children in the neighborhood.

The phrase 'fell vibrating' is ungrammatical; the intended meaning is a continuous action in the past. Use 'kept vibrating' (past tense with present participle) to show repeated/continuous action. Also 'make friends with' should be 'make friends with' is correct; keep past tense consistency ('helped me to make' -> 'helped me make' is acceptable but unchanged here). Suggestion: use 'kept vibrating' to indicate recurring vibration in the past. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Many people use them to commute because they help avoid traffic and save money, while others rise by for exercise.

✓ Many people use them to commute because they help avoid traffic and save money, while others ride them for exercise.

The verb 'rise' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'ride'. Also 'ride by' is wrong in this context; use 'ride them' or 'ride bikes'. 'Ride' is the base verb meaning to travel on a bicycle. Ensure correct object 'them' or 'bikes' follows the verb. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× For example, you could see group cycling together in parks at the weekend.

✓ For example, you can see groups cycling together in parks at the weekend.

Tense and number: 'you could see' suggests conditional or past possibility; general statement about common occurrence should use present tense 'you can see'. Also 'group' should be plural 'groups' to match 'cycling together'. Use present simple for habitual/general facts. Grammar problem type ID: 6