自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and fluency by correcting sentence structure and using a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Avoid short, choppy phrases (e.g., “Indeed brought me a lot of joy” is incomplete). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “and,” “which,” or “so”).

範例: Yes — I had a bicycle when I was a child, and I often rode it with my neighbors. We would race each other around the block, which was great fun and helped me make friends.

建議: Be careful with direct answers and accuracy: the question asks about popularity, so start with a clear opinion (Yes/No) and then give specific reasons and examples. Improve cohesion by using linking words (for example, “however,” “instead,” “for short trips”) and correct singular/plural and article usage (e.g., “a short trip,” “the subway”).

範例: I would say bikes are not very popular for daily travel. Instead, many people prefer public transport like buses and the subway, or they use cars; shared bicycles are mainly used for short trips in city centers.

× We always chased with each other on bicycle.

✓ We always chased each other on bicycles.

'Chase' in this context is correctly used as a transitive verb so 'with' is unnecessary; saying 'chased each other' expresses mutual action. Also 'on bicycle' should be plural or count with an article: use 'bicycles' or 'on our bicycles'. Use plural because more than one person rode separate bikes. Suggestion: say 'We always chased each other on our bicycles.' to be more natural.

× Indeed brought me a lot of joy.

✓ It indeed brought me a lot of joy.

The sentence lacks a subject; English requires an explicit subject. Adding 'It' (referring to riding bikes) completes the sentence. Alternatively use 'Riding bicycles brought me a lot of joy.' for clarity. Suggestion: include a clear subject before the verb.

× No, you can say these days people really buy their own bicycles.

✓ No, these days people rarely buy their own bicycles.

The original reply contradicts the intended meaning and uses informal phrasing 'you can say'. Also 'really buy' is awkward. Use adverb 'rarely' or 'not often' to match context that bikes are not popular. Maintain present simple for general truths. Suggestion: avoid 'you can say' and choose clear adverb to express frequency.

× Instead they choose to use shared bicycles for just short trip.

✓ Instead, they choose to use shared bicycles for just short trips.

Missing comma after 'Instead' and 'trip' should be plural 'trips' to match general statement. Also include article or quantifier 'just' is fine but 'for short trips' is more natural. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns when speaking generally and include necessary punctuation.

× Most people use buses, subway and take their own cars instead of using bicycles.

✓ Most people use buses and the subway, or take their own cars instead of using bicycles.

Parallel structure error: 'use buses, subway and take' mixes forms. Make items parallel: 'use buses and the subway, or take their own cars.' Also include definite article 'the' before 'subway' when referring to the system in general. Maintain present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: keep parallel verb structures and add appropriate articles.