自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce fillers ("umm") and correct tense/grammar (e.g., "I didn't buy a new one"). Use linking words to show sequence (e.g., "however", "after that").

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it a few times, but it broke, so I didn’t buy a replacement. After that, I often borrowed bikes from friends when I wanted to ride.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and correct grammar (e.g., "not so many people have bikes"). Avoid hesitations and unclear words. Use linking words to structure points (e.g., "for example", "because"). Add one concrete example or statistic if possible.

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Most bicycle users are children; adults prefer cars or public transport because cities are busy and distances are long. For example, my family drives to work rather than cycle.

× Yes, I did have a bike I rode a few times before it broke and umm after that I didn't buy the new one and umm I just borrowed from time to time from different persons.

✓ Yes, I had a bike. I rode it a few times before it broke, and after that I didn't buy a new one; I just borrowed one from different people from time to time.

Multiple issues: incorrect auxiliary 'did have' for simple past is unnecessary (use 'had'), missing pronoun/object after 'rode' (use 'it'), incorrect article 'the new one' (should be 'a new one'), awkward word order and missing punctuation. Use simple past consistently for past events, include appropriate articles and pronouns, and use 'people' instead of 'persons' in informal spoken English. Suggestions: use 'had' for possession in past, include object pronouns, use 'a' before non-specific singular nouns, and punctuate to separate clauses.

× Not really, not so many people does have a bike, it's just maybe kids.

✓ Not really, not so many people have bikes; it's mostly children.

Error: 'does have' is incorrect with plural subject 'people'. Use base verb 'have' with plural subjects. Also use plural 'bikes' to match general reference and replace 'kids' with 'children' for formality or keep 'kids' informally. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement (people + have), and match singular/plural for general statements.

× However, uh, adults uh don't Rd. ride bikes so often and they are using more cars or other type of vehicles.

✓ However, adults don't ride bikes very often, and they use cars or other types of vehicles more.

Issues: unnecessary filler 'Rd.' and awkward progressive 'are using' for habitual action; use simple present 'use' for habits. Also change 'more cars' word order to 'use cars more' and 'other type of vehicles' should be 'other types of vehicles' or 'other vehicles'. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions, remove fillers, and use correct plural forms ('types of vehicles').

× Maybe by public transportation.

✓ Maybe by public transportation.

This sentence fragment is acceptable as a short spoken reply, but to be grammatically complete use 'Maybe by public transportation' as given or better 'Maybe by public transport' or 'Maybe they use public transportation.' Original issue: fragment lacks subject and verb; to fit the conversation, provide a full clause. Suggestion: use full sentence 'Maybe they use public transportation.'