自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains several mistakes. First, you answered with the wrong noun (“bag” instead of “bike”) and some verbs are incorrect or misused (“read” instead of ‘ride’, “arrest” instead of ‘race’ or ‘chase’). To improve: 1) Directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence mentioning the bike. 2) Use correct verbs and simple past forms (e.g., “I had,” “I rode”). 3) Add 1–2 specific supporting details (where, with whom, what you did) linked with a simple connector (e.g., “and,” “so,” “then”). 4) Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it every morning and evening with my cousin around my grandparents’ house, and we would race and explore the nearby streets. Those rides were fun and helped me feel independent.

建議: Your answer is understandable but has grammar and coherence issues. Improve it by: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I think bikes are very popular.”). 2) Use correct sentence structure and connect supporting ideas with linking words (e.g., “Furthermore,” “Besides”). 3) Provide one specific reason or example (e.g., use for commuting, affordable, popular among young people) to make the response specific. 4) Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Besides being affordable for many people, they are widely used for short commutes and leisure; for example, many young people go roller-skating or cycle together in the evenings along the main boulevards.

× Yes, I had a bag when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'a bag' instead of 'a bike' which contradicts the examiner's question about a bike; additionally 'when I was child' is missing the definite article 'a' before 'child'. Correct sentence uses 'a child'. Suggestion: use the article 'a' with singular countable nouns like 'child' and ensure the object matches the context ('bike').

× I used to read it every morning and evening with my cousin around my grandparents house and we would arrest each other and explore neighborhoods.

✓ I used to ride it every morning and evening with my cousin around my grandparents' house, and we would race each other and explore the neighborhood.

Several issues: 'read' is incorrect verb; context requires 'ride' (past habitual 'used to ride'). 'Grandparents house' needs possessive apostrophe 'grandparents\'' and 'we would arrest each other' is wrong verb choice; likely meant 'race'. 'Neighborhoods' is plural but singular 'the neighborhood' fits when referring to the local area. Suggestion: choose verbs that match intended meaning (ride, race), use possessive for owners, and keep number consistent with context.

× From my perspective, yes, bikes, one of the most popular in my country.

✓ From my perspective, yes, bikes are one of the most popular means of transport in my country.

The original lacks a verb and has incorrect structure ('bikes, one of the most popular'). This is a sentence structure and subject-verb agreement issue: add the verb 'are' and complete the phrase 'one of the most popular' by specifying what they are popular as (e.g. 'means of transport'). Suggestion: ensure sentences include a verb and complete the comparative phrase.

× Not only bikes, but also roller skating at night together around my city.

✓ Not only bikes, but people also go roller skating around my city at night.

Original fragment lacks a clear subject and verb; it's an incomplete sentence. Rewriting adds subject 'people' and verb 'go' to make a complete sentence and places 'at night' in a natural position. Suggestion: ensure sentences have a subject and verb and place time expressions where they sound natural.