自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer more directly with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and word order, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one or two specific details. Use linking words for coherence. For example, start with "Yes, I did" then give who bought it and a brief reason why it was special. Keep to 1–3 sentences and correct grammar (past tense).

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bright red bike when I was eight, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood because it made me feel independent and allowed me to visit my friends more easily.

建議: Give a direct opinion, use correct vocabulary (e.g., "bikes" not "spike"), and clear grammar. Explain reasons with linking words (e.g., "because"/"however") and provide one specific example or consequence. Limit to 2–3 clear sentences and avoid fillers.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially in cities where traffic is heavy. However, I think motorbike riding can be dangerous because many drivers ignore traffic rules, so accidents are common on busy roads.

× Yes, I had one when I was a child, so it is very, very beautiful experience when I am child.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child, so it was a very, very beautiful experience when I was a child.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. The events (having a bike and the experience) occurred in the past, so verbs should be in the past tense ('was' not 'is', 'was a child' not 'am child'). Also add the article 'a' before 'very, very beautiful experience' for correctness. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past memories and include the article where needed.

× So it's bought, uh, it's bought me for our father.

✓ So it was bought for me by my father.

Pronoun and passive construction are incorrect. 'It's bought' is present perfect-like and unnatural here; the correct past passive is 'it was bought'. The object 'me' should be the recipient; the agent 'my father' should follow 'by' in passive. Also 'our father' is ambiguous; use 'my father' for a personal possession. Suggestion: use 'it was bought for me by my father' for clear past passive.

× Yes, spike is uh, popular, but uh, driving bikes is not very safety because it's too dangerous uh, when we driving in a road, there are so many careless people driving their vehicles.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular, but riding them is not very safe because it's too dangerous when we drive on the road; there are so many careless people driving their vehicles.

Multiple errors: 'spike' is likely a mispronunciation of 'bikes' and should be 'bikes are popular' (plural noun with 'are'). 'Driving bikes' is awkward—use 'riding them' or 'riding bikes'. 'Not very safety' uses wrong word form; use adjective 'safe'. 'When we driving' lacks auxiliary and correct verb form; use 'when we drive'. Preposition 'in a road' should be 'on the road'. Sentence was long and run-on; split or connect with appropriate punctuation. Suggestion: use plural agreement, correct adjective form, correct verb forms, and proper prepositions.

× So when we are, when we access.

✓ So when we are on the road, when we pass by, or when we are riding.

The fragment 'when we are, when we access' is incomplete and uses 'access' incorrectly; 'access' is not natural for being on a road. Likely intended meaning is 'when we are on the road' or 'when we pass by'. Also ensure a complete clause with subject and verb. Suggestion: replace with a complete phrase like 'when we are on the road' or 'when we pass by' depending on intended meaning.