自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and grammatical errors, use a clear past-tense structure, and be concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, I, I). Also correct verb forms (e.g., “I had a bike” not “I did had”).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it to ride to school every day and to go to nearby sports grounds to play cricket with my friends. However, I had a few accidents while cycling, and on one occasion I fractured my arm, so I became more cautious afterwards.

建議: Good content and coherence. To improve further, add a brief specific example or comparison and a linking phrase to make the answer more vivid and slightly longer (but still within 5 sentences). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “commuters,” “micromobility,” “infrastructure”).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, particularly in big cities where traffic is heavy. For example, many office commuters choose bicycles for short trips because of dedicated bike lanes and rental schemes, which also promote cycling as a form of exercise and eco-friendly transport.

× Yes, I did had a, had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The auxiliary 'did' is used with the base form of the main verb in past simple questions and negatives. Using 'did had' is incorrect because 'had' is already in past form. Remove 'did' to use the simple past correctly: 'I had a bike.' Suggestion: use 'I had' for affirmative past statements, and 'Did you have...?' for questions.

× I used it to go to school and then come back often.

✓ I used it to go to school and then come back often.

This sentence is mostly acceptable but contains a slight mixture of infinitive forms. 'Used it to go...and come back' is understandable, but parallelism is better: 'used it to go to school and to come back often' or 'used it to go to school and come back.' Suggestion: keep parallel structure in verb phrases; 'used it to go to school and come back' is concise and correct.

× I, I ride my bike and go to different, uh, sporting venues.

✓ I rode my bike and went to different sporting venues.

The student is describing past habitual actions when they were a child, so past tense should be used consistently. Using present tense 'ride' and 'go' with past context is incorrect. Change verbs to past simple 'rode' and 'went.' Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when narrating past events.

× So I'll probably go over there and uh, play with my friends and then I'll be coming back.

✓ So I would probably go over there and play with my friends and then come back.

The student is recounting habitual past actions, so using future 'I'll probably' is inappropriate. Use 'would' to indicate habitual past behaviour ('would' as past habitual) or use simple past: 'I probably went over there...'. Also 'I'll be coming back' is a future progressive form not suitable for past narration. Use 'and then come back' or 'and then I would come back.' Suggestion: use 'would' or past simple when describing habitual actions in the past.

× But the experience of driving wasn't as good because I had few accidents while riding my bike, uh, once I fractured.

✓ But the experience of riding wasn't as good because I had a few accidents while riding my bike; once I fractured a bone.

Multiple issues: 'driving' mismatches context (bicycles are 'riding'); 'had few accidents' without article implies almost none; to mean several, use 'had a few accidents.' 'Once I fractured' is incomplete; English requires object (what was fractured). Add 'a bone' or specify body part: 'I fractured my arm.' Also use a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'riding' for bicycles, use 'a few' to indicate some accidents, and include the object with 'fractured'.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities where traffic congestion makes them a convenient option.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities where traffic congestion makes them a convenient option.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately uses present simple to describe a general truth. No change needed. Suggestion: none.

× Many people use bicycles for short commutes and exercise, and you can also see dedicated bike lanes and rental schemes in urban areas that encourage cycling.

✓ Many people use bicycles for short commutes and exercise, and you can also see dedicated bike lanes and rental schemes in urban areas that encourage cycling.

This sentence correctly uses present simple to describe general facts and observations. No grammatical correction is necessary. Suggestion: none.