自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (use correct past tense), shorten redundancy, and add one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add a brief specific detail using a linking word. Avoid repeating 'have'.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. In fact, I owned three bikes, and my favourite was a mountain bike that my mother bought for me when I was ten, which I used to ride on rough trails near our house.

建議: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'for instance'). Use correct subject-verb agreement and smoother phrasing.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Indonesia because many students commute to school by bicycle. For example, in my neighbourhood most families prefer bikes for short trips since they are cheap, convenient, and eco-friendly.

× Yes, of course I have a bike.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student's reply should use past tense. Use 'had' instead of 'have' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past simple for facts in the past: 'I had a bike.'

× When I was a child, I have three bikes, especially the mountain bike that my mother bought for me.

✓ When I was a child, I had three bikes, especially a mountain bike that my mother bought for me.

The clause begins with 'When I was a child' so the verbs should be in past tense. Change 'have' to 'had'. Also use the indefinite article 'a' before 'mountain bike' because it is one of several bikes and not previously specified. Suggestion: Use past simple for past possessions and include articles for singular countable nouns: 'I had three bikes, especially a mountain bike that my mother bought for me.'

× For my opinion bikes are popular in Indonesia because most of us or lot of students here also they are coming to the school by using a bike or they using another public transport but the more friendly is using a bike.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are popular in Indonesia because many students come to school by bike or by public transport, but using a bike is more convenient.

Multiple problems: 'For my opinion' is incorrect; use 'In my opinion.' 'Most of us or lot of students' is ungrammatical and wordy; use 'many students' or 'a lot of students.' 'They are coming to the school' should be simple present for habitual action: 'come to school.' 'By using a bike' is wordy; 'by bike' is idiomatic. 'They using' lacks auxiliary and should be 'they use' or simplified. The phrase 'the more friendly is using a bike' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'more convenient' expresses the intended meaning. Suggestions: Use 'In my opinion' to introduce an opinion, use simple present for habitual actions, use 'by bike' and choose clear comparative adjectives like 'more convenient.'