自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is largely unintelligible and does not directly respond to the question. To improve: 1) Give a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike (yes/no). 2) Follow with 1–2 specific supporting details (when you had it, who it belonged to, memories of learning to ride). 3) Use simple, correct sentences and basic linking words (for example, when, so, because). 4) Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Practise pronouncing and organizing short statements before adding extra detail.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bicycle that my parents bought for me when I was seven. I learned to ride it in the park near our house, and I remember falling a few times before I felt confident. Because I rode it every day, I got better quickly and used it to visit friends.

建議: Your answer is understandable and relevant, but has some unclear word choices and limited detail. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and why). 2) Replace unclear phrases (e.g., 'those feet') with accurate words (e.g., 'young adults' or 'fitness enthusiasts'). 3) Add one more specific example or brief reason (e.g., environmental concerns, traffic). 4) Use a linking word to connect idea and example (for example, moreover, because).

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young adults and people who exercise regularly. For example, many commuters use bicycles to avoid traffic and save money on transport. Moreover, there are more bike lanes in cities now, which makes cycling safer and more appealing.

× Just as he has the tight endless in the primary school and that height was taken by morning Rd.

✓ I had only a simple bike when I was in primary school and I used to ride it in the mornings on the road.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect pronouns, verb forms and word choices, making the sentence structure incorrect. Replace 'Just as he has' with 'I had only' to match speaker and past tense; 'the tight endless' and 'that height' are nonsensical and should be replaced with 'a simple bike'; 'was taken by morning Rd' appears to mean 'used to ride it in the mornings on the road.' Suggestions: identify the subject (I), use past tense consistently for childhood (had, used to ride), choose accurate nouns and prepositional phrases (in primary school, in the mornings on the road).

× She preached it because at the time I said the properties that I wanted to learn how to run the bike regarding new Shields.

✓ I remember saying at the time that I wanted to learn how to ride a bike, so she taught me.

The original sentence mixes pronouns and verbs incorrectly and uses wrong vocabulary ('preached', 'properties', 'run the bike', 'new Shields'), causing a sentence structure error. Use a clear subject and verb order: 'I remember saying' or 'I said' followed by the content clause 'that I wanted to learn how to ride a bike.' Use 'she taught me' instead of 'she preached it.' Suggestions: use appropriate verbs (teach/learn/ride), keep pronouns consistent (I/she), and keep clauses logically ordered.'

× Yeah, I think it's quite popular among young people, especially those feet, those people who have habits to exercise every day.

✓ Yeah, I think it's quite popular among young people, especially those who have a habit of exercising every day.

The phrase 'those feet' is incorrect (wrong word) and 'have habits to exercise' is ungrammatical. Use 'those who' to introduce the relative clause and 'have a habit of exercising' or 'who exercise every day' for natural present-tense description. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.'

× For example, my friend, she rides her bike every day when she goes to work.

✓ For example, my friend rides her bike every day when she goes to work.

Including both 'my friend' and the pronoun 'she' is redundant. The correct subject-verb form is 'my friend rides' (third person singular 'rides'). Remove the extra pronoun to avoid redundancy. Ensure subject-verb agreement (friend -> rides).