自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and irrelevant comments (e.g. “they believed that” without completing the thought). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I had several bikes as a child, and they played an important role in my upbringing. For example, my parents bought me a new bike every year, which motivated me to practice and improved my confidence. As a result, I learned discipline and became more independent.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer (yes/no or a brief opinion), then support it with specific reasons and examples. Avoid vague phrases like “source of transformation” and use linking words (for example, however, therefore). Limit to 2–3 sentences and be precise about who uses bikes and why.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, mainly among younger people. For example, many teenagers and young adults cycle for leisure and exercise, while older people generally prefer walking or using public transport.

× They helped me grow discipline and confidence in myself.

✓ They helped me grow in discipline and confidence in myself.

The original sentence omits the preposition 'in' after 'grow' when referring to developing qualities; 'grow in discipline' is the correct collocation. Add 'in' to indicate development of those qualities. Suggestion: Use 'grow in' + noun to express increase in qualities or abilities.

× I was astonished by the different colors of bikes, different brands.

✓ I was astonished by the different colors and brands of bikes.

The original repeats noun modifiers in a disjointed way, creating an awkward structure. Combine modifiers with 'and' and place them before 'of bikes' for clarity and fluency. Suggestion: Coordinate related modifiers with 'and' and keep them together before the noun phrase.

× My parents used to take me every year to buy a new bike.

✓ My parents used to take me every year to buy a new bike.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. It correctly uses 'used to' for habitual past action. Note: No change required.

× They believed that.

✓ They believed that it was important.

'They believed that' is a sentence fragment because 'that' is a subordinating conjunction which requires a clause following it. Provide the content of their belief to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Add the clause that explains what 'they believed' to avoid a sentence fragment.

× Honestly, bikes are really popular in my country, but not as a source of transformation.

✓ Honestly, bikes are really popular in my country, but not as a means of transportation.

The phrase 'source of transformation' is likely a lexical error; the intended meaning is 'means of transportation.' 'Transformation' is incorrect contextually. Replace with 'means of transportation' to match common collocation. Suggestion: Use 'means of transportation' when referring to a transport method.

× It's just a way to have fun and stay healthy and maintain your fitness.

✓ It's just a way to have fun, stay healthy, and maintain fitness.

Parallelism issues: list items should be parallel. Use base verb forms consistently and remove the possessive 'your' before 'fitness' to match style. Also add commas to separate items. Suggestion: Keep verb forms parallel in lists and maintain consistent pronoun usage.

× In contrast, only young people ride bikes.

✓ In contrast, only young people ride bikes.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple to state a general truth. No correction needed.

× Old people tend to leave that thing for young people.

✓ Older people tend to leave that to younger people.

Use of 'old people' and 'young people' is less natural; 'older' and 'younger' as comparative adjectives are preferred. 'Leave that thing for' is wordy; 'leave that to' is more idiomatic. Also avoid 'thing' by keeping it vague or specifying 'activity' if desired. Suggestion: Use comparative adjectives and the idiom 'leave X to Y' for smoother expression.