自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Focus on clear grammar, correct vocabulary, and a concise structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common mistakes (e.g., "when I was a child", "brother", "parents") and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My parents first let my older brother teach me how to ride, and after I learned they bought me my own bike. I practiced in the park near our house every weekend until I felt confident.

建議: Give a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct words (e.g., "children", "adults", "because") and provide one or two concrete examples. Keep answers to no more than five sentences and avoid long run-on sentences.

範例: I think bicycles are popular among children but less common among adults in my country. This is mainly because the hot climate makes cycling uncomfortable for daily commuting. For example, families often ride bikes together in parks during weekends, but adults usually prefer motorbikes or cars for work.

× Yes, when I were a shy I do have a bike since I do have one big butter.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike because my older brother had one.

Incorrect use of 'were' and 'a shy' — should be 'was a child'. Also 'do have' is wrong tense and unnecessary auxiliary; use past simple 'had'. 'since I do have one big butter' is unclear: likely meant 'my older brother had one'. Use clear noun 'brother' and past simple to match past time frame. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' and simple past verbs for actions in the past.

× So actually my my butter have one of them.

✓ So actually my brother had one of them.

Subject-verb disagreement and wrong noun: 'butter' should be 'brother' and with singular subject 'brother' in past tense use 'had' not 'have'. Also remove duplicate 'my'. Suggestion: ensure noun is correct and verb agrees in number and tense.

× And after that my mom and my dad let my BA let my brother teach me how to ride a bike and after that they bought me another one.

✓ After that, my mom and dad let my brother teach me how to ride a bike, and then they bought me another one.

Redundant and broken phrase 'let my BA let my brother' is ungrammatical. Maintain clear sentence order: subject (my mom and dad) + verb (let) + object (my brother) + infinitive phrase (teach me how to ride a bike). Use commas to separate clauses. Keep tense consistent (past simple). Suggestion: remove duplicates and reorder to follow standard S-V-O structure.

× I have to say that by is popular for a shy but not for adult because I used to live in Thailand and the weather is so hot so we used to ride a bike just when we go to the park or for the garden just for that but not for everyday use.

✓ I have to say that bikes are popular for children but not for adults because I used to live in Thailand and the weather is very hot, so we rode bikes only to go to the park or the garden, not every day.

Multiple errors: 'by' should be 'bikes' (noun), and subject-verb agreement requires plural verb 'are'. 'shy' should be 'child' or 'children'. 'adult' should be plural 'adults'. Tense consistency: for habitual past use 'used to' or simple past 'rode'; I changed to 'used to live' plus 'we rode' to indicate past habit. 'just when we go' mixes present with past — changed to past. Also simplify phrase 'just for that' to 'not every day'. Suggestion: correct nouns, match plural forms, and keep tense consistent for past habits.