自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaikan: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan bentuk waktu (gunakan past tense konsisten), singkat dan jelaskan ide utama serta tambahkan satu atau dua detail spesifik. Hindari pengulangan kata dan perbaiki penggunaan kata kerja seperti 'have' → 'had' dan 'buy' → gunakan kata yang tepat ('borrow' jika meminjam). Contoh perbaikan spesifik: gunakan satu kalimat topik diikuti oleh 1–2 kalimat pendukung yang terkait, serta linker sederhana seperti 'because' atau 'so'.

範例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents didn’t allow me to ride. Instead, I often borrowed my neighbor’s bicycle, and we would ride together around the park after school, which was really fun.

建議: Perbaikan: Perbaiki tata bahasa (possessive and contractions) dan struktur kalimat; gunakan linking words untuk koherensi. Jelaskan dengan lebih spesifik siapa yang sering mengayuh sepeda, kapan, dan untuk tujuan apa. Hindari frasa canggung seperti 'they love to cycling' — gunakan 'they enjoy cycling' atau 'they like to cycle'.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many students cycle to school every day, especially in suburban areas, and older people often cycle in the mornings for exercise and fresh air.

× When I was a child, I don't have any bike, I don't have any bicycle because of my parents didn't allow me to bike a bicycle.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have any bike or bicycle because my parents didn't allow me to ride one.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses ('When I was a child' requires past tense) so 'don't have' is incorrect; it should be 'didn't have'. Also, 'because of my parents didn't allow me' is ungrammatical: use 'because' + clause or 'because of' + noun phrase. Use 'didn't allow me to ride one' instead of 'bike a bicycle.' Suggestions: keep consistent past tense, use 'didn't have' and 'didn't allow me to ride one.'

× So when I was a child, I used to buy my neighbor bicycle.

✓ So when I was a child, I used to borrow my neighbor's bicycle.

The original uses 'buy' which contradicts 'used to' habit context and likely wrong verb choice. Also possessive is missing: use 'neighbor's bicycle.' If meaning was to use occasionally, use 'borrow.' Keep past habitual 'used to' + base verb.'

× It was fun which bicycle together.

✓ We had fun riding the bicycle together.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and word order is wrong. Use subject 'We' with past tense 'had' and verb phrase 'riding the bicycle together' to express the idea. Ensure clear subject and verb and proper verb form 'riding.'

× I think bike's quite popular in my country because some students usually go to school by bicycle and some elder people they love to cycling around to do some exercise.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in my country because some students usually go to school by bicycle and some elderly people love cycling around to get some exercise.

'Bike's' is incorrect contraction; use plural 'bikes are' (subject-verb agreement). 'Some elder people they' is redundant; use 'some elderly people' (adjective form) and remove extra pronoun 'they.' Use 'love cycling' (verb + -ing) not 'love to cycling.' 'To get some exercise' is a more natural phrase. Maintain plural and correct adjective form.