自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, use correct verb tense and vocabulary, reduce hesitations and fix mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, replace "I do have a back" with "I had a bike" and correct "writing" to "riding." Avoid filler words like "umm."

範例: I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and quite small, so I rode it every day around my neighborhood. Because my school was nearby, I often used it to visit friends after classes.

建議: Answer directly and use plural/singular forms correctly, reduce hesitations, and organize reasons with linking words. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific supporting details and a brief comparison or reason. Use connectors like "because" and "however."

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride in the early morning because the weather is cooler, but fewer ride at noon since it gets very hot. Therefore cycling is mostly a morning or evening activity rather than a daytime one.

× I do have a back when I was a child, it was, umm, pink, and I was writing it every day.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child; it was, umm, pink, and I rode it every day.

The original sentence uses 'do have a back' which contains two errors: 'back' is a misspelling/mistyping of 'bike' and the present tense 'do have' conflicts with the past-time phrase 'when I was a child'. This is a tense consistency and word choice issue. Change 'do have' to past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child', correct 'back' to 'bike', and replace 'was writing it every day' with 'rode it every day' because 'write' is the wrong verb for using a bike. Suggestion: use the simple past for completed past situations and choose verbs that match the action (ride a bike).

× It is quite popular in my country.

✓ They are quite popular in my country.

The question asks about 'bikes' (plural), so the subject should match plural. Using 'It is' refers to a singular subject; change to 'They are' to agree in number with 'bikes'. Suggestion: match pronoun number to the noun being discussed (bikes -> they -> are).

× I saw people riding bikes umm in the morning usually because when it's in the noon it's quite hot, so not many people riding bikes.

✓ I see people usually riding bikes in the morning because at noon it's quite hot, so not many people ride bikes.

Multiple issues: tense consistency and word order. The student used 'I saw' (past) while describing a general habit—use present simple 'I see' or 'People usually ride'. 'In the morning usually' is awkward; place 'usually' before the main verb: 'usually riding' or 'usually ride'. 'When it's in the noon' is incorrect preposition/phrase; use 'at noon'. Finally, 'so not many people riding bikes' lacks a main verb—use 'so not many people ride bikes'. Suggestions: use present simple for habits, place adverbs like 'usually' before the verb, use 'at noon' for midday, and ensure each clause has a finite verb (ride/are riding).