自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap anlaşılır fakat dilbilgisi ve akış açısından geliştirilmelidir. Öncelikle cümleleri daha kısa ve net tutun (en fazla 3–4 kısa cümle). Zaman uyumuna dikkat edin (past tense: had, was, had a frame, my dad bought). Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve açıklayıcı detaylarda daha spesifik olun (ör. “bones” yerine “bell” veya “frame” gibi doğru kelimeyi kullanın). Bağlaçlarla mantıklı geçişler kurun (for example, because, so). Ayrıca duyguyu belirtirken tam bir cümle kullanın: why you liked it or how you felt.

範例: I had a small pink bicycle when I was a child. It had a wicker basket on the front and my dad would buy flowers to put inside it. Because it looked pretty, other kids were often jealous, and I felt very proud to ride it around the neighborhood.

建議: Cevap açık bir görüş içeriyor ama dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi düzeltilmeli. Present tense kullanın (are popular / is not very popular). Sebep-sonuç ilişkisini net bağlaçlarla kurun (because, so, therefore). Daha spesifik örnekler verin (ör. traffic density, lack of bike lanes, safety concerns). Cümleleri iki veya üç kısa cümleye bölün ve tekrarları kaldırın.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my city. The streets are overcrowded and there are few safe bike lanes, so riding a bike can be dangerous. Therefore, most people prefer cars or public transport.

× Actually, when I was a child I had a bike and it was really pretty and it was pink and it has a bones and a basket and my dad's bought me lots of flowers to put in my basket and everyone jealous of my cycle and I was really.

✓ Actually, when I was a child I had a bike and it was really pretty and it was pink and it had some bones and a basket and my dad bought me lots of flowers to put in my basket and everyone was jealous of my cycle and I was really.

The sentence contains several verb form and auxiliary errors. 'it has a bones' should be 'it had some bones' to match past tense and use correct plural article; 'my dad's bought me' incorrectly combines contraction and perfect tense — use simple past 'my dad bought me' to match narrative past; 'everyone jealous of my cycle' lacks the past verb 'was' so use 'everyone was jealous'. Use consistent past tense throughout the description. Suggestion: keep all main verbs in past tense for past narratives and include required auxiliary verbs (was/were) and correct past participle forms when using perfect tenses.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

No change needed. The preposition 'in' is correct for referring to popularity within a country.

× I think it was not so very popular because I live in a crowded big city and there always traffic and using cycle is not safe for us and so people don't usually prefer bikes.

✓ I don't think they are very popular because I live in a crowded big city and there is always traffic and using a bicycle is not safe for us, so people don't usually prefer bikes.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly ('I think it was' should be present 'I don't think they are'). Use 'there is always traffic' (singular 'traffic' with 'there is'). 'using cycle' is missing an article and more natural as 'using a bicycle'. Also change 'people don't usually prefer bikes' is acceptable but keep it after a comma. Suggestions: maintain present tense for general statements, use articles before singular countable nouns, and use natural collocations ('bicycle' or 'bike').