自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use past tense), reduce fillers (uh), and add one brief reason with a linking word. Use specific phrasing like “I didn’t have a bike as a child” and explain parents’ concern in one sentence.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents were worried about accidents, so they preferred I walk or use public transport for safety.

建議: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use correct verbs and linking words (for example, because and therefore). Provide one or two specific reasons (cost, convenience) and a brief example to support your point. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are the cheapest and most convenient form of transport. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute short distances and to avoid traffic, so they are preferred over cars.

× No, I do not uh, add the pipe uh, when I got child because my parents don't want to give me bike that time because they want to keep me safe from any accident.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my parents did not want to give me one at that time; they wanted to keep me safe from accidents.

Multiple issues: wrong tense and verb choice ('do not' present instead of past 'did not') and incorrect phrase 'add the pipe'. The phrase 'when I got child' is ungrammatical; use 'when I was a child' for age reference. Use the pronoun 'one' to refer to 'a bike' to avoid repetition. 'Don't' should match past context as 'did not'. Also change 'that time' to 'at that time' and 'any accident' to plural 'accidents' or 'an accident'. Suggestion: use past tense for past situations and correct pronouns and standard expressions for childhood ('when I was a child').

× Yes uh, bikes are very popular in my country because uh, everybody drive uh, ride the bike because it's uh, main public transportation and it's cheapest, uh, cheapest uh, vehicle in my country to drive. That's why everybody give preference to it.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because everybody rides them; they are a main form of public transportation and the cheapest vehicles to use. That's why everyone prefers them.

Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency errors: 'everybody drive' should be 'everybody rides' (third person singular). Use 'them' to refer back to plural 'bikes'. 'It's main public transportation' should be 'they are a main form of public transportation' to match plural subject. 'It's cheapest vehicle' should be 'the cheapest vehicles' or 'the cheapest form of transport'. 'Everybody give preference' should be 'everyone prefers'. Suggestions: ensure verbs agree with subjects (everybody/everyone requires third person singular), maintain number consistency (bikes -> plural pronouns and plural nouns), and avoid repeating words.