自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, grammatical, and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Also correct tense and possessive/pronoun errors (e.g., “when I was a child,” “I still keep my bike”). Aim for 2–4 sentences, varied vocabulary, and specific details about memories or why the bike was special.

範例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child, and I still keep it now as a memento. When I look at it, I remember riding with my friends in the neighborhood every Sunday, which makes me feel nostalgic. This bike reminds me of simpler times and happy childhood memories.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “as a result”). Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “there are not enough bike lanes,” “people have to ride among cars”). Keep sentences compact and avoid hesitation sounds. Include a brief consequence or suggestion to show depth.

範例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country because there are not enough bike lanes and safe roads. For example, cyclists often have to share busy roads with cars, which is dangerous, especially for young people. As a result, many people prefer motorbikes or cars for safety and convenience.

× Yes uh I had a bike when I was child it's it's very it's very nice.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; it was very nice.

Missing the article 'a' before 'child' is a singular/plural/article issue; also tense consistency and connecting clauses: use 'a child' and past tense 'was' to refer to the past. Suggestion: include 'a' with singular nouns and use past forms when describing past states.

× I'm keeping my car I'm keeping my bike nowadays uh when I see my bike, I always remember about my childhood and it's very good feeling.

✓ I still have my car and my bike nowadays. When I see my bike, I always remember my childhood and it gives me a very good feeling.

'Keeping' is awkward here; use stative verb 'have' for possession (present simple). 'Remember about' is incorrect collocation; use 'remember' without 'about'. 'It's very good feeling' lacks article and proper verb: use 'gives me a very good feeling' or 'it makes me feel good.' Suggestion: use 'have' for possession and correct verb-object collocations.

× I feel my child yes. I feel my uh.

✓ I feel like a child again.

Original fragments are incomplete and unclear. 'I feel my child' is ungrammatical; likely intended idea is 'I feel like a child' meaning recalling childhood. Suggestion: use 'feel like' + noun to express similarity and avoid sentence fragments.

× Unfortunately, but it's not popular in my country because we, we don't have enough the, uh, roads for bike.

✓ Unfortunately, bikes are not popular in my country because we don't have enough roads for bicycles.

'the roads' is incorrect with 'enough' and general statement; omit 'the'. Also 'bike' used as countable noun needs plural or 'bicycles'. Suggestion: use 'enough roads' and plural 'bikes' or 'bicycles' for general statements.

× And because of this, a lot of our society suffered from this, uh, for instance, when, uh, when one person want to ride bike, she, he or she should ride bike, uh, among of cars and it's very dangerous for young people.

✓ Because of this, many people in our society suffer; for instance, when a person wants to ride a bike, they must ride among cars, and it's very dangerous for young people.

Multiple issues: 'a lot of our society suffered from this' is awkward—use 'many people in our society suffer' and match tense. 'One person want' has subject-verb agreement (want -> wants). 'Ride bike' needs article 'a bike'. 'Among of cars' is incorrect preposition; use 'among cars' or 'among traffic'. Pronoun 'she, he or she' is wordy; use singular 'they' for neutrality. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct articles, and proper prepositions like 'among' without 'of'.