自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 어휘 선택에서 다수의 오류가 있어 의미 전달이 혼란스럽습니다. 우선 단어 선택 실수를 고치세요(예: vibe → bike). 동사 형태와 목적어 사용을 바로잡아 자연스럽게 말해야 합니다. 또한 주제문을 분명히 하고 하나 또는 두 개의 간결한 추가 세부사항(예: 누가 주었는지, 얼마나 오래 탔는지, 왜 좋아했는지)을 연결어(for example, because 등)로 덧붙이면 명확성이 높아집니다.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my father, and I used it almost every day to ride around the neighborhood. For example, I often rode to my friend’s house after school because it was faster than walking.

建議: 의미는 대체로 전달되지만 문법, 어순과 연결 표현을 개선해야 합니다. 현재 진행형·비교 표현을 정확히 사용하고, 주장을 뒷받침하는 구체적 이유나 예시를 하나 정도 추가하세요. 또한 질문 말미의 표현을 질문형에서 평서형으로 바꿔 응답을 완결하세요.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country because oil and fuel prices have been rising steadily. As a result, many people choose to commute by bike instead of driving, especially for short distances around the city.

× Yes, I had a vibe which was my dad, but for me I really enjoyed to write, enjoyed writing a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike that belonged to my dad, but I really enjoyed riding it.

The student used 'vibe' instead of 'bike' (wrong word choice) and mixed incorrect verb forms ('enjoyed to write' is wrong). The phrase 'which was my dad' is ungrammatical; use a relative clause 'that belonged to my dad'. 'Enjoyed' should be followed by a gerund: 'enjoyed riding it.' Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('bike'), use relative clauses for possession ('that belonged to'), and follow 'enjoy' with a gerund. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yeah, because oil prices increasing higher and higher nowadays.

✓ Yes, because oil prices are increasing nowadays.

The original omits the auxiliary verb and uses redundant comparative 'increasing higher and higher.' Use present continuous with auxiliary 'are increasing.' Avoid redundancy; 'increasing' alone conveys the meaning. Suggestion: use 'are increasing' for current trends and avoid adding 'higher and higher.' Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So how many people try to bike instead of driving their own car and commute by transportation?

✓ So many people are trying to bike instead of driving their own cars and commuting by public transportation.

The sentence begins with 'So how many' which turns it into a question, but the speaker intended a statement. Change to declarative 'So many people are trying...' Also 'car' should be plural to match 'many people' (subject-verb agreement), and 'commute by transportation' is awkward; use 'commuting by public transportation.' Use present continuous 'are trying' to match 'nowadays.' Suggestion: convert question to statement, match plurality, and use natural collocations like 'public transportation.' Grammar problem type ID: 27