自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid tense errors and repetition (e.g., "I do have" should be past tense). Also vary vocabulary (use "received" or "was given" instead of "got") and correct small grammar issues ("my mom accompanied me" not "accompanies").

範例: Yes. I had my first bike when I was about six or seven; it was a birthday present from my mother. She often accompanied me in the afternoons while I practiced riding, which helped me gain confidence quickly.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then add two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct phrasing and more precise vocabulary ("mode of transport", "recreational activity", "mountain biking"). Avoid awkward constructions like "wherein" and repeat words less.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular. Firstly, many people use them as an affordable mode of transport for short trips. Secondly, cycling is a common recreational activity — groups often go mountain biking or trail riding on weekends.

× Yes, yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use past tense. Using present tense 'do have' conflicts with the time reference. Suggestion: Match verb tense to time frame; use 'had' for past ownership.

× When I was a child, I remember I was just like 6 or 7 years old I think when I got my first bike and that was my mom's gift to me.

✓ When I was a child, I remember I was about six or seven years old when I got my first bike; it was my mom's gift to me.

Run-on and repetition of 'when' and informal 'just like' are stylistic; primary issue is past tense consistency and clarity. Use past tense verbs ('remember', 'was', 'got') consistently and simplify phrasing. Use numerals written as words in formal speech transcripts (optional). Suggestion: Remove redundant 'I think' or place it more naturally: 'I think I was about six or seven'.

× During my birthday and every afternoon my mom accompanies me outside as I ride and practice riding my bicycle.

✓ On my birthday and every afternoon my mom accompanied me outside while I rode and practiced riding my bicycle.

Time preposition 'during my birthday' is incorrect; use 'on my birthday'. Also tense should be past to match context ('accompanied', 'rode', 'practiced'). Use 'while' instead of 'as' for simultaneous past actions. Suggestion: Use correct time prepositions ('on' for days/events) and maintain past tense throughout the sentence.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because I can see a lot of people using bike as their mode of transportation and also they use this as a hobby wherein they go to the mountains and go trail biking.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because I can see a lot of people using bikes as their mode of transportation, and they also use them as a hobby when they go to the mountains for trail biking.

Mismatch between plural 'people' and singular 'bike' creates a singular/plural error; use plural 'bikes' and pronoun 'them'. 'Wherein' is formal/awkward; use 'when' or 'to' and 'for trail biking' is more natural. Suggestion: Ensure nouns and pronouns agree in number and choose natural connectors like 'when' or 'to'.