自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and explains why you didn't have a bike, but it is a little long and contains filler words (“uh”) and some awkward phrasing ("asked for my parents"). To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, use correct collocations (e.g., “ask my parents for one”), and add one specific supporting detail. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences with linking words to show cause or contrast.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Because I spent most of my time playing indoors with dolls and my friends, I never asked my parents for one, so I never learned to ride.

建議: Your answer addresses the question and gives a reason, but it contains fillers and some grammatical errors ("no park or playground" should be "no parks or playgrounds," and "like they have in Canada" needs clearer structure). Improve by giving a clear opinion first, then a linked supporting detail with specific examples, and correct plural forms. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as "however" or "although."

範例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country; however, children often have nowhere safe to ride. For example, there are few parks or playgrounds in many neighborhoods, so kids usually ride on busy roads instead.

× there are no park or playground like they have in Canada

✓ there are no parks or playgrounds like they have in Canada

The nouns 'park' and 'playground' are countable and refer to general types, so they should be plural when speaking about them in general. Use 'parks' and 'playgrounds' to match plural reference: 'there are no parks or playgrounds like they have in Canada.' Suggestion: Make countable nouns plural when referring to them in general contexts.

× I never even asked for my parents at all

✓ I never even asked my parents at all

The verb 'ask' with a direct object does not require the preposition 'for' when referring to people. 'Ask for' is used for things or favors; when requesting something from someone, say 'asked my parents.' Remove 'for' to correct the pronoun/object usage. Suggestion: Use 'asked my parents' instead of 'asked for my parents' when indicating you made a request to them.

× I enjoyed playing, uh, with my friends, with dolls at my house, so I never thought of getting a bike or I never even asked for my parents at all

✓ I enjoyed playing with my friends and with dolls at my house, so I never thought of getting a bike and never even asked my parents for one

The original sentence is repetitive and awkwardly connected. Use parallel structure and correct placement of 'for one' to indicate what was asked. Combine related items with 'and' and place the object 'one' after 'asked my parents' to clarify the request. Suggestion: Use parallel structures ('playing with my friends and with dolls') and place objects after verbs ('asked my parents for one').

× we only have houses and roads so it's a very busy area

✓ we only have houses and roads, so it's a very busy area

This sentence is grammatically correct in tense but needs a comma before 'so' to join the clauses correctly. Keep present tense 'have' to describe a general situation. Suggestion: Insert a comma before coordinating conjunctions joining independent clauses: 'houses and roads, so it's a very busy area.'

× there is not much space for children to ride a bike or play outside

✓ there is not much space for children to ride bikes or play outside

'Children' is plural, and when referring to riding in general, use the plural noun 'bikes' to match plurality. 'There is' is acceptable because 'not much space' is uncountable; change 'a bike' to 'bikes' to agree with 'children.' Suggestion: Match the plurality of nouns when speaking about a group (children ... bikes).