自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and start with a clear topic sentence. Remove filler words (e.g., "uh", "and so yeah") and limit to at most 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail (when or where you learned) and use a linking word to show cause: e.g., "so" or "therefore." Also replace informal phrases like "learned how to bike" with "learned to ride a bicycle" for slightly more natural phrasing.

範例: I didn’t own a bike as a child. Instead, I often rented one from nearby rental shops, so I learned to ride there. I usually practiced in the park near my house, which was quiet and safe for beginners.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then add two specific supporting points with linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. State your opinion, then explain why with concrete examples (e.g., infrastructure, use for commuting, issues such as shared lanes). Finish with a short concluding statement. Use appropriate vocabulary like "designated bicycle lanes," "commuting," and "shared with motorcycles."

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use them for short commutes and there are designated bicycle lanes on many roads; however, these lanes are often shared with motorcycles, which can make cycling less safe. Despite this, cycling remains a common and convenient option for daily travel.

× No, I didn't have a bike as a child, but we are in an area where there are many available renting shops and I could have just, uh, rented a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike as a child, but we were in an area where there were many bike rental shops and I could have just rented a bike.

The student mixed present tense ('are', 'are many available renting shops') with past context ('as a child'). Maintain past tense for consistency: use 'were' instead of 'are' and 'were many' instead of 'are many'. Also use the correct noun form 'bike rental shops' instead of 'available renting shops'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: keep all verbs referring to childhood in past tense.

× And so yeah, I would always just rent a bike and that's when I learned how to bike.

✓ And so yeah, I would always just rent a bike, and that's when I learned how to ride a bike.

The phrase 'learned how to bike' is understandable but uses 'bike' as a verb, which is informal. More natural is 'ride a bike'. This is not a -ing form error per se but concerns inappropriate verb choice. Suggestion: replace informal verb use with 'ride a bike' for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I do believe that bikes are quite popular in our country and there is also a designated lane in the roadsides which is for bicycles but it's but it is a shared lane for motorcycles also.

✓ Yes, I do believe that bikes are quite popular in our country, and there is also a designated lane at the roadside for bicycles, but it is a shared lane with motorcycles.

Problems: 'in the roadsides' is incorrect preposition and plural; use 'at the roadside' or 'on the roadside' (singular) and 'designated lane for bicycles' is fine. The repetition 'but it's but it is' is redundant. Use 'shared lane with motorcycles' rather than 'for motorcycles also'. Suggestion: fix preposition and remove redundancy to improve grammar and clarity.

× And though it is popular but I don't think.

✓ Although bikes are popular, I don't think they are the main mode of transport.

The original sentence is incomplete and uses contradictory connectors ('though' with 'but') and vague 'I don't think.' Use a complete clause: 'Although' or 'Even though' and finish the thought (what the speaker doesn't think). Also match tense and subject ('bikes are popular'). Suggestion: avoid combining 'though' and 'but' and always complete the idea after 'I don't think.'