自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition ("have and have") and informal fillers like "yeah." Also correct tense and article usage when needed.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle throughout my childhood and I rode it every weekend. Because it let me explore the neighbourhood and meet other children, it reduced my stress and helped me make friends.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, tense, and avoid repetition). Use linking words such as "however" or "because" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, they used to be very popular a few years ago; however, in recent years more people have preferred motorbikes and cars because they are faster and more convenient for commuting. For example, many families now choose motorcycles for longer journeys and city travel.

× As far as I'm concerned, I had a bike when I was a kid and I rode it every weekend, which helped me reduce stress and have and have more friends, yeah.

✓ As far as I’m concerned, I had a bike when I was a kid and I rode it every weekend, which helped me reduce stress and make more friends.

Error type 8: incorrect verb + -ing form not used here but sentence contains awkward verb choice 'have and have more friends' and wrong verb 'have' for forming new friendships. The correct verb is 'make' friends. Use 'make' to indicate forming new friendships; 'have more friends' sounds like possession rather than forming relationships. Also remove the repeated 'and have'. Keep past tense 'helped' consistent with 'had' and 'rode'. ID: 8

× Yes, definitely bike were more popular in my country a few years ago, but in recent years people people preferring prefer riding motorbikes and cars because they are more convenient and faster.

✓ Yes, definitely bikes were more popular in my country a few years ago, but in recent years people prefer riding motorbikes and cars because they are more convenient and faster.

Error type 2 and also 1 and 8: The sentence has multiple issues: 'bike were' has singular/plural mismatch; use 'bikes were' (plural subject with plural verb) or 'the bike was' for singular. The student wrote 'people people preferring prefer' showing repetition and wrong verb form 'preferring' after 'people' — simple present 'prefer' is correct to describe a recent trend. Keep past for 'were more popular' and present for ongoing preference. Remove duplicate 'people'. ID: 2; also involves ID:1 and ID:8