自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid tense and pronoun errors (e.g., "it was" not "it's").

範例: Yes, I did. I rode my bicycle to elementary school every day, which made the trip quicker and more fun. For example, I could reach school in ten minutes instead of walking, and I often raced my friends on the way.

建議: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (because, therefore) properly and avoid awkward pronouns like "myself." Be concise (max 5 sentences).

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many families buy bikes for children to commute to school, and inexpensive repairs make them a cost-effective option; therefore many people prefer them for daily use.

× It was extremely fun because it's fast and comfortable.

✓ It was extremely fun because it was fast and comfortable.

The sentence describes a past experience (It was extremely fun), so the verbs describing the bike's qualities must also be in the past tense for consistency. 'It's' is present tense; change to 'it was'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when talking about past events.

× Myself and my friends also had bike when I was a when we were a child.

✓ My friends and I also had bikes when we were children.

Use of 'Myself' as subject is incorrect; use 'I'. Word order should be 'My friends and I'. 'Had bike' is missing plural article/number: use 'had bikes' for general plural or 'had a bike' for each single. The phrase 'when I was a when we were a child' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'when we were children' to match plural subject. Suggestion: use subject pronouns correctly and ensure number agreement.

× Myself and my friends also had bike when I was a when we were a child.

✓ My friends and I also had bikes when we were children.

The noun 'bike' needs an article or plural form. In this context talking about multiple people having bikes, the plural 'bikes' is appropriate. Alternatively, 'a bike' would be used if referring to a single person's bike. Suggestion: choose proper article or plural form based on meaning.

× And also the cost of bike is not so expensive, therefore a lot of people buy can buy bikes.

✓ Also, the cost of bikes is not very high, therefore a lot of people can buy bikes.

'Cost of bike' should be 'cost of bikes' when speaking generally. Use 'is not very high' instead of 'not so expensive' for clarity. The original contains redundant 'buy can buy' — modal verb placement is wrong; use 'can buy'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches general statements and avoid word repetition.

× And also the cost of bike is not so expensive, therefore a lot of people buy can buy bikes.

✓ Also, the cost of bikes is not very high, therefore a lot of people can buy bikes.

The original 'buy can buy' incorrectly orders and duplicates the verb and modal. Correct modal structure is 'can' + base verb: 'can buy'. Place modal before main verb and remove duplication. Suggestion: use 'can' followed by base verb without another auxiliary.

× Myself and my friends also had bike when I was a when we were a child.

✓ My friends and I also had bikes when we were children.

Subject-verb agreement requires plural subject to match plural context. 'Myself' is not a subject form and 'had bike' mismatches count. Changing to 'My friends and I' and 'had bikes' fixes agreement. Suggestion: use proper subject pronouns and match noun number to subject.

× Myself and my friends also had bike when I was a when we were a child.

✓ My friends and I also had bikes when we were children.

The original sentence contains redundancy and a fragment 'when I was a when we were a child', making it structurally incorrect. Simplify to a clear subject and time clause: 'when we were children'. Suggestion: remove redundant phrases and ensure one coherent time clause.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used my bicycle when I went to my elementary school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used my bicycle when I went to elementary school.

'My elementary school' is acceptable but 'elementary school' without 'my' is more natural when speaking about attendance. Tense use is correct (past). Suggestion: omit unnecessary possessive when context is clear.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: Yes, I think so.

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: Yes, I think so.

No correction needed for tense; sentence is correct. Included here to show it's grammatically fine and consistent with present general question. Suggestion: none needed.

× It was extremely fun because it's fast and comfortable.

✓ It was extremely fun because it was fast and comfortable.

As above, 'it's' is present tense contraction for 'it is' and doesn't agree with past context. Use past 'it was' for third person singular in past tense. Suggestion: match verb tense to overall sentence tense.