学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 内容清晰，但有语法和连贯性问题，且回答过长。注意避免重复（如两次提到兴趣和职业目标），纠正语法（如“major in finance and UH”应为“major in finance”或说明第二项），并控制在最多5句内。可以用一两句先给出直接答案，再补充一到两个具体细节，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

範例: I’m a student. I will graduate this year from Southwestern University of Finance and Economics, where I major in finance because I’m interested in banking and investments. After graduation, I hope to work at a commercial bank to gain practical experience in investment services.

建議: 回答总体清楚且信息具体，但有小的语法错误和语序问题（如“which located”应为“which is located”）。可以用一开始的主题句直接回答，再用一两句支持细节，并用连接词提高连贯性。

範例: I study at Southwestern University of Finance and Economics, which is located in Chengdu, Sichuan Province. The campus is peaceful and the teachers are very supportive, so it’s an excellent environment for concentrating on my studies.

建議: 回答简洁且有具体理由，使用了连接词，但可略微精简以避免冗长。可将原因分为两部分并用更自然的连接词（for example / furthermore）来组织信息。

範例: Yes, it is. Because the school is in the city center, it’s easy to get to and there are many shops and restaurants nearby, which makes daily life convenient. Furthermore, the supportive teachers help students when they need guidance.

建議: 观点明确且有可行建议，但语音犹豫词（uh/umm）影响流利度，句子结构可更自然。建议先给出直接回应，然后用一两句详细说明改变的原因与用途，避免重复（“quiet study rooms”与“silent study areas”意思重复）。

範例: Yes. I think the campus should provide more quiet study rooms so students can concentrate better. These rooms could also be reserved for practicing speaking or group presentations, which would help improve communication skills.

建議: 回答清晰且具体，给出学习方式和原因，但句子略长。可先给出总体计划，再用连接词列出具体方法，使结构更紧凑。

範例: I plan to improve my English and develop my investment skills to understand the markets better. To do this, I will take online courses on finance and investment and read books and market reports in English.

× I'm a student and I will graduate from Southwestern University of Finance and Economics this year and major in finance and UH because I'm interested in banking and investments.

✓ I'm a student. I will graduate from Southwestern University of Finance and Economics this year and major in finance because I'm interested in banking and investments.

句子结构过长且含有多余词汇“UH”，导致意思不清晰。应拆成两句以提高可读性，并删除语气词“UH”。建议：把不同内容分句，如先说明身份，再说明毕业时间和专业。

× I hope to work in bank after graduation.

✓ I hope to work in a bank after graduation.

名词前缺少冠词。英文中表示在某一类机构工作通常用“work in a/an + 可数名词”。应加不定冠词“a”。

× I'm studying in Southwestern University, which located in Chengdu, Sichuan Province.

✓ I'm studying at Southwestern University, which is located in Chengdu, Sichuan Province.

动词缺失导致从句不完整，应在which后加动词“is located”。此外，表示就读通常用介词“at”而非“in”。建议：使用“studying at”并在定语从句中加上系动词。

× Our campus is very peaceful and the teachers are supportive, so it's a great place to focus on studies.

✓ Our campus is very peaceful and the teachers are supportive, so it's a great place to focus on studying.

短语“focus on studies”虽可接受，但更自然的表达是“focus on studying”或“focus on our studies”。这里改为“studying”以保持动名词结构一致性。

× Yes, it is. Our school is located in the city center, so it's easily accessible and there are plenty of shops and restaurants nearby, which makes daily life very convenient.

✓ Yes, it is. Our school is located in the city center, so it's easily accessible and there are plenty of shops and restaurants nearby, which make daily life very convenient.

先行词“shops and restaurants”是复数，定语从句中谓语动词应与其一致，使用复数动词“make”而不是单数“makes”。

× Yes, I would uh, the campus could provide more quiet study rooms and silent umm study areas so that students can concentrate better and also use for practicing speaking abilities.

✓ Yes, I would. The campus could provide more quiet study rooms and silent study areas so that students can concentrate better and also use them for practicing speaking skills.

原句包含语气词“uh/umm”且句子衔接不当；“Yes, I would”后应接具体内容或分句；“use for practicing speaking abilities”中缺少宾语且“abilities”用词不自然，应改为“use them for practicing speaking skills”。建议删除口头语并补上代词宾语。

× My future study plans are to improve my English and develop my investment skills because I want to understand the markets better, so I may take online courses or read books about investing.

✓ My future study plans are to improve my English and develop my investment skills because I want to understand the markets better, so I may take online courses or read books on investing.

“books about investing”并非错误但更地道的表达是“books on investing”。此处问题较轻，属于动名词/固定搭配使用，建议替换为更自然的搭配。