学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答总体信息完整，但语法和表达有小错误，且句子间衔接可更自然。应该注意冠词和时态（例如“since graduation”或“since I graduated”），并用连接词使信息更流畅（如“so”或“therefore”）。同时可以用一句话简洁概括职业，再补充具体细节，不要超过5句。

範例: I work as an online math teacher. I started after I graduated and currently teach about 30 classes a week, because I have around 13 students. As a result, I spend most evenings preparing lessons and giving one-on-one tutoring.

建議: 回答清晰且信息具体，但开头有点冗余（不必先说已毕业）。建议先直接回答地点，再补充教育背景和具体学校，用连接词（for example, and）保持逻辑。注意地名和学校名之间用逗号自然分隔。

範例: I graduated from Silicon University in Sichuan Province with an undergraduate degree. Before that, I completed my primary and secondary schooling in my hometown, Oxo County, Xinjiang.

建議: 观点明确但表达有小错误和不够简洁。“reckoned”用法显得书面且不自然，冠词用错（“a amazing”应为“an amazing”）。建议用更自然的口语词汇（e.g. I think, I believe），并用一两条具体原因支持观点（比如丰富的图书馆、优质师资）。

範例: I think Chengdu is a great place to study because it has abundant educational resources, such as well-equipped libraries and many experienced teachers. Compared with my hometown, students here have more access to academic seminars and tutoring.

建議: 观点明确且具体，但句子结构不够连贯，有语法错误（如“It needs improvement”而非“Needs improvement”）。建议先给主题句，然后用连接词列出具体改进（e.g. more interactive teaching, use of technology），并举一两个例子说明如何改进。

範例: Yes, I would change the teaching methods to make classes more interactive. For example, teachers could use group projects and online tools to encourage student participation instead of just reading from PowerPoint slides.

建議: 回答目标明确，但表达可以更自然和具体。“on the cards”是口语俚语，考官可能更喜欢明确短语。建议说明具体步骤或时间表（e.g. taking certification exams, attending training courses），并用一两句说明动机或计划时间，保持简洁。

範例: I plan to become a certified math teacher and am currently preparing for the teaching certification exam. I am taking training courses and hope to complete the certificate within the next year so I can start teaching in schools.

× I've been working as an online math teacher since the graduation.

✓ I've been working as an online math teacher since graduation.

“since” 后面接时间点或具体事件（如 2015, last year, my graduation），而不是加定冠词的名词短语“the graduation”。应使用“since graduation”或“since my graduation”。另外也可用“since I graduated”。

× From last year up till now, I have recruited around 13 students, which means I have to teach up to 30 classes a week.

✓ From last year up till now, I have recruited around 13 students, which means I have to teach up to 30 classes a week.

句子本身时态逻辑可接受（现在完成时表示从过去到现在的情况），但“up till now”和“from last year”重复意义，可简化为“Since last year, I have recruited...”。此处为建议性改写而非严格语法错误，因此保留原句。

× Well, I have already graduated.

✓ Well, I already graduated.

两种说法都可。使用现在完成时“I have already graduated”强调结果与现在相关，使用简单过去“I already graduated”更常用于口语。此处可视语境任选，其为时态选择问题，不是必须修正的错误。

× I got my undergraduate degree in Silicon University, Sichuan Province, and I completed my primary school and secondary school back in my hometown, Oxo County, Xinjiang.

✓ I got my undergraduate degree from Silicon University in Sichuan Province, and I completed primary and secondary school back in my hometown, Oxo County, Xinjiang.

英语中通常使用 get/receive a degree from 某校，故用“from Silicon University”。地名后表示省份用“in Sichuan Province”。“primary school and secondary school” 前一般不加定冠词“my”可去掉或保留，但并列时常简化为“primary and secondary school”。

× I reckoned Chengdu, Sichuan is a amazing place to receive education with its abundant educational resources.

✓ I reckon Chengdu, Sichuan is an amazing place to receive an education because of its abundant educational resources.

“reckoned” 用词偏过去时/正式，用“I reckon”或“I think”更自然；“a amazing” 错误，元音发音前用“an”；“receive education” 更常说“receive an education”；连接词用“because of”更自然。

× Yes, the most crucial issue needs to be fixed is the way classes are taught.

✓ Yes, the most crucial issue that needs to be fixed is the way classes are taught.

原句缺少关系代词“that”或需要改写为“What's most crucial is the way classes are taught.” 当前句子结构不完整，需加入连接成分以形成正确主从结构。

× Needs improvement both in my hometown and in my university.

✓ They need improvement both in my hometown and at my university.

原句缺主语，动词单独成句不正确。应加主语（例如“they”指“the teaching methods”）并使用正确介词“at my university”。

× I believe the most viable option here is to keep up with social development rather than merely reading aloud from PowerPoint presentations mechanically.

✓ I believe the most viable option here is to keep up with social development rather than merely reading PowerPoint slides aloud mechanically.

“reading aloud from PowerPoint presentations” 有些冗长，可改为“reading PowerPoint slides aloud”。介词“from”可省略或用“from”也可，但“slides”更地道。此项为用法优化，不是致命错误。

× Well, I am planning to become an official math teacher.

✓ Well, I am planning to become an official math teacher.

句子语法正确，使用现在进行时表示近期计划合适，无需修改。

× Currently I am working on my certificate and I think it is on the cards.

✓ Currently I'm working on my certificate, and I think it's on the cards.

原句语法正确，短语“on the cards” 表示有可能发生，符合语境。此处仅建议收缩形式使口语更自然。