学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần trình bày rõ và ngắn gọn: trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi bằng một câu chủ đề, sau đó bổ sung 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể. Sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, mạo từ, trật tự từ) và tránh câu dài lủng củng. Ví dụ: dùng “I’m still a student” hoặc “I’m a secondary school student preparing for university entrance exams.”

範例: I’m still a student. I study at a well-known secondary school and I’m currently preparing for my university entrance exams.

建議: Cần cấu trúc câu rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời vị trí, sau đó nêu chi tiết cụ thể (tên trường, đường, khoảng cách). Sửa ngữ pháp (I'm studying / my school is located on X Street / it’s five minutes from my house). Tránh lặp từ và đảm bảo mệnh đề liên kết mạch lạc.

範例: I study at Janice Kund Secondary School, which is located on James Street. It’s very close to my house — only about a five-minute walk.

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) và giải thích rõ ràng với những ví dụ cụ thể (phòng thư viện, phòng máy tính, giao thông). Chú ý dùng từ đúng (facilities, convenient) và cấu trúc câu hợp lý. Tránh các từ không rõ nghĩa như “the cloud” hay “hate many”.

範例: Yes, I think it’s a good place to study because the city centre has many modern facilities, such as libraries and computer labs, which help students study more effectively. It’s also very convenient for transport.

建議: Nên trả lời rõ ràng với một đề xuất cụ thể và lý do. Sử dụng cấu trúc điều kiện đơn giản hoặc “I would like…” và diễn giải cách thay đổi sẽ cải thiện tình hình. Sửa ngữ pháp (more public transport / more convenient / easier to get to school).

範例: Yes. I would like there to be more public transport near my school, because if buses or trains were more frequent it would be much easier and more convenient for students to get to school.

建議: Trả lời trực tiếp với mục tiêu nghề nghiệp rõ ràng (I want to become a successful businessman/woman). Nêu kế hoạch học tập cụ thể (đại học nào, chuyên ngành) và lý do. Sửa ngữ pháp (become a successful businessman/woman, attend National Economics University, study marketing and management). Giữ câu ngắn gọn và rõ ràng.

範例: In the future I want to become a successful businessman, so I plan to attend the National Economics University to study marketing and management to gain professional knowledge.

× What I am still a student in.

✓ I am still a student.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra preposition 'in'. Use the standard subject-verb-complement order: 'I am still a student.' This removes the unnecessary 'in' and places the verb 'am' after the subject.

× I study in well known secondary school in my country nearly I have university entrance exams.

✓ I study at a well-known secondary school in my country, and I am preparing for university entrance exams.

Use the article 'a' before 'well-known secondary school' and hyphenate 'well-known'. Use the preposition 'at' for attending a school. The original had run-on clauses; connect them with 'and' and use present continuous 'am preparing' to express ongoing action.

× I'm study in well known secondary school in my country which is Janice Kund is located in the James Street is very nearby my house and I just five minute go to school for my house.

✓ I study at a well-known secondary school in my country called Janice Kund, which is located on James Street very near my house, and it takes me just five minutes to get to school.

Use simple present 'I study' or 'I attend' not 'I'm study'. Use article 'a' and hyphenate 'well-known'. Use 'called' to name the school. Use preposition 'on James Street' and adjective 'near' not 'nearby my house'. Express duration with 'it takes me five minutes to get to school.' Correct word order and prepositions.

× Well I think the city center which is a good place to study because in here have many modern facility can support for student easy to study more over the cloud in here is very convenient hate many.

✓ Well, I think the city center is a good place to study because there are many modern facilities that support students and make studying easier; moreover, the environment here is very convenient.

The original has incorrect clause structures and missing verbs. Use 'there are' for existence of facilities (There be issue but also sentence structure). Use plural 'facilities' and relative clause 'that support students'. Replace 'in here' with 'here' and 'make studying easier' for clarity. 'Moreover' introduces an additional point; avoid 'hate many' which is incorrect.

× Uh yes my school is located in James St. IN. I want to change change St. have more public transport this more convenience for student can easy to going to school.

✓ Yes, my school is located on James Street. I would like there to be more public transport on the street because that would make it more convenient for students to get to school.

Use 'on James Street' and avoid abbreviations like 'St.' inconsistently. Express desire with 'I would like there to be' and use 'public transport' as uncountable. Use 'more convenient' (adjective) and 'for students to get to school' (infinitive with 'to'). Fix grammar and word order.

× In the future, I want to become a successful business, so I need go to National Economics university in my country to learn more professional about marketing and manager.

✓ In the future, I want to become a successful businessman, so I need to go to the National Economics University in my country to learn more about marketing and management.

Use 'businessman' for a person (or 'businessperson' for gender-neutral). Include the article 'the' before the university name. Use infinitive 'to go' and 'learn more about' for correct preposition. Use 'management' not 'manager' to refer to the field of study.